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Reviews for Cameras Everywhere

By : Redrum
  • From ANON - Dadella on December 10, 2004
    Wow, this was really good... I was a touch confused, at first, but that last paragraph bit really cleared it up and made it that much better...
    It was sad, though... what with the 'act' they had to 'play'...
    good job, this is a definate favourite...
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  • From currie on March 09, 2004
    Wow. I'm sorry, but that was terrible. You spell poorly (did you even proofread?), and apparently can't tell "your" from "you're." The characters were completely flat, the narration focused more on the colours of clothing than even slight introspection, the sex was short and uneventful, the barely-there plot was weakened far further by a lack of proper explanation, and in the end it was outright depressing. There would have been a lot more potential for enjoyable angst if you had let the reader know why Seifer was acting like such a sick, abusive fuck all the time. They could have exchanged knowing glances, Seifer's stomach could have tightened into knots as Squall tried to explain to him that he could take it, and it could have been really fucking romantic, but no, you chose to remove the use of expression altogether. And Squall's clothing doesn't deserve three paragraphs of choppy description. --It doesn't matter.--
    What were you trying to achieve with this?
    I'm going to poke you really hard now, because you fucked this up despite its potential and it makes me angry.
    *pokehardpokepoke*
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  • From ANON - Omakase Shimasu on February 14, 2004
    Fantastically well written, I absolutely loved it! The interaction at the end, and the thoughts about each other throughout the story, it was just so heartbreaking. Poor Squall and Seifer, having to do this kind a mission when it's so obvious they love each other to pieces!

    ^-^ I just had to get that out of my system! >< Shame, how nobody reviewed this piece before I got my hentai hands on it!

    P.S.: Also, I wouldn't ma sea sequel of sorts. Something like a longer version of this piece. Keep up your delicious work!
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