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By : Naniris
  • From WonderMint on July 19, 2015
    I absolutely love the way you write Seifer. You really have a handle on what makes him tick, and it's fabulous to see him work. Zell is a little less amusing probably less due to your skill and more due to his own personality. The short tease you gave us of Squall shows you know how to handle him fabulously as well, which I find fabulously teasing. Overall I'm magnificently impressed.

    The short interlude with Zell's grandpa is... well, it's kind of funny in a creepy way? It pulled me out of the action a bit, which may have been intentional as you seem to be enjoying a lighter tone. But I will say you don't need gimmicks like that. You have hot characters doing hot things in hot ways with very hot thoughts, and I'm hooked.

    Chapter three is pretty much the hottest thing that's ever happened. Completely wrong as far as consent goes, but it's at least heartening that Seifer is demonstrating limits (I am at least telling myself that he would wake Zell before jumping him, even if it's just wishful thinking). I love how sensual he is while still remaining his aggressive, bullying self. It's a combination I haven't seen managed before, and it pleases me. I can't wait to see him get what he wants, preferably in ways that don't make the rape siren go off. Thanks for sharing your work!
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  • From lunael55 on February 04, 2011
    I know it's not gonna happen, but GOD do I hope Seifer's gonna get his ass kicked and Zell's going to find a reaaaaaal nice bf. May I suggest a certain bi Galbadian? But at this point anyone would do, honestly. I just love Zell too much to see him being treated like this for more than a few short encounters.

    Good job, keep going :)
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  • From Faoiltierna on January 29, 2010
    Have I mentioned how much I just adore this story? It is one of my favorite pairings, right up there with Zell/Seifer ;-)

    And it is HOT!

    I'm so glad you are back posting updates here on AFF...there will be more soon, right? *grin*

    That Zell...no wonder Seifer just cannot keep his hands off of him!
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  • From ANON - YACUMO on November 16, 2006
    WHY HAVENT YOU UPDATED!!!!!!!
    THE HELL U ARE GOING TO LEAVE US WANTING FOR MORE.
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  • From ANON - sethdrix on April 28, 2005
    what happened to the next chappies? did you remove them? i would say that this is a good seiferxzell story but i don't know if i would continue reading it once you've brought in squall in the scene, i'm not a fan of seiferxzellxsquall threesome. i'm faithful with irvinexsquall pairings but let's see what happens....
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  • From ANON - Jhonen on January 02, 2005
    This is so good! I read it after you posted it and I've been waiting for you to finish it. Please finish it? Please...
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  • From ANON - cat on November 17, 2004
    nargh! is it just me, or has the sex in the first chapter disappeared? :( cos that was hot!
    great story so far tho :D
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  • From currie on August 06, 2004
    Aw, thanks for the plug! And sorry I took so long to get to this... life's been hectic. But now I've read it and it's great!
    Since you're open to suggestion, I want to say this: the flow feels a little off at times. Like "while this was happening, he had done this," when it might have been better to say what's happening right when it is happening. It's one of the hardest things to do, though, keeping everthing in order. And sixty-nines are hard to write too! Er, for me, anywho. Not sure why. lol... You did a good job. Hottness all over the place. AND Squall being around -- that really got my ears perked up!
    Just please, whatever you do, *please* don't make Squall into an asshole for the sake of keeping Seifer and Zell focused on one another. That'll make me sad.
    Really surprised me when grandad showed up. Odd timing, but it fit, with all of this being about so much more than sex -- more than those two realize. :D It seemed like a huge conversation just stuck in the middle, though, like the rest of the story froze to make room for it. I can see it working better intermingled with the action, maybe. Though if it kinda flashed by in a split second the way thoughts tend to, pay no mind to my ramble.
    I have sooo many outtakes like yours from chapters, and I save them all... I've considered sticking them on my webiste or something when the series is finished (someday, heh). Now I will. ^_^
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  • From Naniris on July 28, 2004
    Hi, Zierra:

    Why are you sorry for your comment? I was actually comending you for it. I was telling other reviewers to leave whatever speculations and predictions they have in a review, just like you did.

    I don't start writing a following chapter until I see the response for the one before. That way I see what people like and what they don't like. I also get ideas and inspiration from comments. Like your comment of Zell initiating the kiss gave me a great idea.

    Don't stop giving me ideas! The more thoughout reviews I get, the faster I write. (Yes, its evil and the reason it takes weeks to update. ~_~)

    Grateful for her readers,
    Naniris

    EDIT: I forgot to mention this in the email I sent you. When I write, I have a skeletal plotline (beginning, middle, end) already planned out. The details, dialogue and specific scenes are added as I go along. For example, when I wrote chapter 1, I never knew that I was going to include Granpa Dincht in chapter 2. It was a snap decision that I liked.
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  • From ANON - Zierra on July 28, 2004
    I'm sorry about that comment, it's just that you asked those questions in the end, and I wanted to answer them. I usually write the whole story before I post the chapters, so I can't really explain why I do that when I know that's useless. Won't do it again though,rnedrned my lesson.

    Liked this chapter alot, sex is a powerful force.

    // Zierra
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  • From ANON - ckygrrl on July 23, 2004
    soooo-good.plz-write-more!!
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  • From ANON - hopemia on July 16, 2004
    Currie told me to read this.
    I'm not a SEifer/Zell fan.. not at all.

    But, your writing is soo good... I liked it.
    I also want to know who Zell was thinking about.

    Maybe you can give Squall someone.. like Irvine... so he won't stay mad at Seifer.
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  • From ANON - Holly on July 04, 2004
    Good story. And although I agree with you that using a condom is extremely important, bois in fanfics don't always need one ^_~
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  • From ANON - purplepenguin on July 03, 2004
    YAY! A SeiferxZell fic, you need to write more.
    Liked the headmaster Cid image, i have thought maybe Headmaster and Squall but maybe that's just me.

    One small thing, you don't have to pay any attention this is just my opinion. I never saw Zell as a neat person, maybe neat if trying to impress someone but then the sort of guy
    that has everything stuffed into one cupboard so that it falls out all the time or something.

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  • From ANON - Pinkstockings on July 02, 2004
    Ah crap. That was (slaps hands on thighs). I need to go to the bathroom now. Glad there is no one else around now.

    In all senceirty, I loved this.

    It sounds like Siefer does not have as much control as he would like. Every time he thought he had Zell where he wanted him, Zell showed the fighting, fast thinking side of himself.

    There is one part where the two become embroiled in a physical fight in the dinning hall which left me a little confused. I do not understand how Zell ended up on Seifers back. He did end up facing away from him, as in the opposite direction?

    not not familiar with the anime? But I still was able to envison this place. I had a boyfriend who went to a millitary academy and that helped.


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