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By : Shehanitan
  • From Siarra on April 13, 2005
    I'm back, and I still don't know what to make of this fic. I'm sorry, it's a good story, but there are so many factors that go against my likes. Now, I must warn beforehand that I might sound a bit harsh, but I've promised to myself to call things as I find them. First of all, it's obvious and you've admitted it yourself that you're a bit out of your depth in this one. The fact that hadn't thought the whole thing through really shows. Another thing is the language. You know I'm more than a bit anal that way... There are numerous few typoes, and I'll be more than happy to discuss them another time.
    I'd suggest that you write this crusade through and then do some serious editing. And that, my friend, would make it a real masterpiece. It's a wonderful mind-boggler which addicts the readers quicker than illegal substances.
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  • From ANON - kk on April 11, 2005
    hmm i started reading your work with "cop" and "training"... wow hottest seiferxsquall i've ever read! @_@ bit me, i like ambiguous squall. maybe i was reading too much into it, but i liked the underlying clashes of desire, logic, spoken and nonspoken words... i love those two.

    so this is the third one i've read of your work. i really love how seifer tries to salvage something in their brutal relationship by making love to squall with all the tenderness. a nice contrast to the first chap. and it's even better with all the tension building up b/c you KNOW that they still need to find a solution to their relationship. i confess to skipping smut scenes to read the plot development before going back to the smut =P hmmm, well, latest development of brainwashing was definitely unexpected. i'll love to know what follows. i hope you don't mind me saying this, imho, you can relay the same amount of plot in less words, which would build a stronger story. also i get the feeling that you seems to want to cover a lot of ground? if i've guessed right, you should just pick a few points and develop them more. (if i'm wrong, oops.) well, that's my two cents. i've being following this since chp 3, and that tells you how much i look forward to this story!
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  • From ANON - Honey Nut Loop on April 10, 2005
    Nope the chapter wasn't too long. Once again it was really well written. I love your ideas.
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  • From writeright on April 10, 2005
    It still doesn't seem quite right to me, like the story of Squall having a breakdown was meant to be written at some other time and not stuck onto this tale, which started off wonderful but now has me a little confused as to where you might be going. There's too much going on, I think. It started off just being about Squall and Seifer and now it's a whole lot more.

    Sorry if I don't make much sense, I'm kinda high on painkillers at the moment. I still like this, don't get me wrong, but there's something about it that seems too out of place.

    CP the ditzy
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  • From ANON - Jupitor Knight on April 09, 2005
    very good story except for some grammer problems. Mostly you need to change some is to are and some of your sentences don't make alot of sense. Also change some was's to were's.
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  • From ANON - lynn on April 01, 2005
    don't worry so much, i still like the story. besides, some plot is nice among the many many lemons (not that i don't read and love those). my advice is to just keep going, cause maybe you'll get to a place you really like.
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  • From ANON - Honey Nut Loop on April 01, 2005
    well i think this is a great story. Personally i can't wait for an update. You'd better not be giving up on me. Always finish what you start. I want to kow what's wrong with Squall!!!! btw when exactly was this mysterious squall dissapears then reappear? U've probs already said and i've just forgotten. Was it D-district? did you just change where they found him?
    I Love this story like all your stories. Update soon ok?
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  • From writeright on April 01, 2005
    Honestly, I think this chapter makes things entirely too complicated. It was easier when I was just thinking of it as Seifer trying to get used to Squall being a masochist and needing the pain to get off, but with the addition of the possible brainwashing and all that, I don't know what to think. Have it get simple again, somehow?

    CP the confuzzled
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  • From ANON - Jupitor Knight on April 01, 2005
    Wow i really like this story do you think you could email me when you update I'd really appreciate that.
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  • From ANON - nerak on March 26, 2005
    Awesome combination of smut AND plot AND character development (esp Seifer)! I cannot wait to see what happened to Squall *frustrated*
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  • From ANON - Skittie on March 25, 2005
    All I got from it is that Squall had a lover before and was mistreated by him. O.o not raped, but abused maybe? Keep going, I like this story.
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  • From writeright on March 25, 2005
    *Yelps* Damn, your Seifer can be a sick fuck sometimes. I like it XD. But all that aside, this story is coming along really well. I feel sorry for Squall and I want to know what happened to make him like this. Please tell us soon?

    CP the sore (damn wisdom teeth)
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  • From ANON - Honey Nut Loop on March 25, 2005
    yey u updated but you so ave to write more. This is fantastic. I need more. Need to know what is happening. Update as soon as you can ok?
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  • From ANON - lynn on March 20, 2005
    is there a way i can sound motivating and not complaining if i ask when your next chapter is coming out? I just really like your story so far and hope you i'll get more soon.
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  • From Siarra on March 14, 2005
    This is soooo lovely, and I'm positive I could kiss your beta! And my kisses are famous... *raises a suggestive eyebrow*
    I'm not entirely sure what to make of this plot yet, but you really seem to know what you do best. Lemons have rarely been this good, and there's just something about a slutty Squall that treats my kinks.
    Keep going strong!
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