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From ANON - Femme Fatal on January 15, 2006
Yay for Zet/Cid! I think it's good that you're looking at all the characters, makes things more interesting. Please update soon!
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From DarkFae on January 15, 2006
fuck i love ur action! and yay for steiner! lol! yes freya was friggin awesome, but i really enjoyed zidane (guess i just have a thing for sneeky dudes lol.) vincent on a materia addiction? lol thats a riot and is as cool as it is creepy! don't leave us hangin!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

-nev
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From ANON - Sands on January 15, 2006
Oh my God. Cid telling a 'your mom' joke. You totally win. That was fabulous. hahahaha! I cracked up.
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From on January 15, 2006
I forgot to mention it in my other review, so I'll mention it now: the cameos from other FFs are great. Steiner in particular amuses me, he totally would still think he was a knight even if he weren't!
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From ANON - MaTaKi on January 14, 2006
Oh my God. I'm so sorry I didn't catch your other updates earlier!! I feel bad for not reviewing. Gonk. I don't usually check the site every day. x_x
But man, I love your story. I loved the chapter with Eddy's letter. I loved all those hints. XD Pretty funny stuff. It made go squee! =D And also the way you described Vincent's red cloak. I dunno. Something about that really got to me. I liked it a whole lot. It just made me imagine Vincent wandering all aimlessly. x3
And with the last two chapters. Aww. I just think the Cid and Zet thing is so adorable. I go into cute mode when I read the two of them having a conversation. Makes me wanna scream, "hug, dammit! D=" XD
Tifa seems crazy... a bit, but I guess it's natural after all that's happened to her. Poor Tifa. ;o;
Gee. Your story really is amazing and it draws me in so much.
And damn, you update fast! XD I'm gonna have to come on every day and check up on you so I don't miss another chance to review. I'm really happy my reviews make you happy. =D *hug*

Keep up the great work!
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From ANON - VahlanaAngel on January 13, 2006
Cid and Zet must get together again. Good stuff is blossoming between them. Poor Tifa. The ancient city thing is ok. In the american strategy guide that's what its called. Do as much as you can adding chapters. We can't get it all done in one fell swoop, then the fic would lose it's luster for everyone. Thank's for the shout out on my fic. I hope everyone enjoys it.
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From on January 13, 2006
Two more awesome chapters. ^o^

And, I'll admit, I did notice the plot branching out a bit, but that is certainly not a bad thing. :3 I love the expanse, it makes it more interesting. Switching characters POV is hard to do for some authors, because it makes the story scattered, but so far I personally have had no trouble at all keeping up with the storyline. I can still remember most details from this story. xD Trust me, you're doing a great job with it so far.

I'm tired and lazy and stuff, so I'll just comment on both chapters as a whole. X3 You really do know how to treat a reader. Clarification on Tifa's POV was excellent. I'm curious to see what lies ahead for everyone at the Forgotten City. ,_,! That whole dream thing is such a tease. And Zet is so cute, argh.
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From on January 13, 2006
I don't think the story's branching out too much. If anything, it's more interesting that way, with all the different relationships developing around the drama. By this point in the story I'm almost interpreting "Vincent Comes Home" as a general reference to Avalanche getting back together to fight their old demons. But there's enough of Vincent that it doesn't seem like you've forgotten him, and h's flashbacks are the most memorable part of the story for me. His past is so sharply different from his present and yet they're the same -- irony. And Zet's doesn't strike me as a Sue, either. Keep it up!
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From DarkFae on January 13, 2006
nice reference to ff8/kingdom hearts lol! (squall is very very sexy, as most kno!!) poor poor cloud... ^_~ i love stories that keep me on the seat of my pants!

-nev
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From ANON - VahlanaAngel on January 13, 2006
Gimmeeee mmmoooooorreee please. I love the call of the materia. Poor Cloud. The man needs some peace. I hope he whoops up on Jenova. She needs her butt beat. Keep 'em comin, and I'll keepa readin. :)
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From on January 12, 2006
Yay for support! n_n I should be thanking you, you put so much effort into this. I swear, the first thing I do when I get on the computer is check this fiction, and it makes me giddy to see it updated so often. Muwaha, M&m. x3 For now, here's a digi-hug [ *huuuug!!!* ] and chocolate houses and lollipops are all good. XD But this fic is sweeter. [whoah, that was lame. *weak drumtap.*]

Are you like, sometimeinthenearfuturepsychic? 'Cause having read half-way through chapter 21, I thought to myself "I am SO glad the next chapter is a Vincent POV." You're so amazing. -Swoons.- XD

Eee, Cid and Zet are so nervous around each other. And Jeremiah makes me giggle. xD The whole dead man thing. I love your original characters, they're fun, and its hard to add OC into existing storylines and make it work out so well, but you do a wonderful job. I love how you balance out the main characters view-points, it makes things interesting.

And chapter 22!! The thought that you put into Eddy's letter to Vincent. Gah. So good. It make me grin. And, even as a small detail and as bad as it sounds, I love the idea of Vincent being a ladie's man when he was younger, as Eddy claims. Tee hee. And Hojo in a bikini. That image made me shudder.
I like the description of Vincent's thoughts, the way he saw his outfit as armor, or a shell. And how he put it back. Signs of recovery, its nice to see my favorite angsty little gunman not-so-solemn. Even if it didn't last -too- long.

The only thing that bothers me now is that I keep wondering what Tifa and Cloud were talking about back in the room before Cloud attacked her. Or what Tifa was thinking. I know it sounds like a desperate plea, but seeing things from Tifa's POV sometime in the near future would be lovely. It would piece together a few things, and I wanna know what she thinks of Vincent and Cloud. She seems to be focused mostly on them lately, and after that last chapter, it makes my brain go boom not knowing her intentions or thought processes. But you're the author, you probably already have everything all planned out.

And, for you writing that last chapter at 2 in the morning, its very good. You're doing so well, keep it up. You've got me so interested in this. x3 It scares me to think this'll be over some day. @w@ I had better see future works by you after. -lovingscold.-

Sorry for the overly drawn out review. ^^;
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From ShadrachVS on January 12, 2006
Mariam, excellent story so far. I am absolutely entranced by it... and No I do not see Zet as a Mary Sue... she lacks the umm... well... 'mad skillz' that seem to possess every MarySue (or male equivalent), If she were a MS then she would be waltzing in armed to the teeth with Master Materia, uber weapons, be so good looking even Nanaki would want to... well... I am sure you get the picture.
If anything you could accuse me of being the male version of a Mary Sue in my Wintermoor story with several of the characters... well cept for the fact that I did create those characters... the world they live in, and the people they are interacting with are from a D&D campaign that I ran... oi I need to do the other 20 chapters to that some time... er... back to the point, could accuse me of this more easily than you... that is what the point was I think...

Anyway, excellent story, and like some of the others (sorry for forgetting names) I do also like the Materia thing; reminds me of what happens when a Paladin picks up a Holy Avenger, to everyone else it is just a very nice well-balanced sword, but in the hands of a glorious-valorous-zealous Paladin it becomes a weapon of Divine Fury and whispers its power to the guy the first time he holds it... though I think it would have been better to have them do something a bit more mysterious (but that may just be my DM sense of 'Confuse the Players as Much as Possible' kicking in) like Alexander saying "I bring justice to the unlawful, purity where there was only corruption, and Light into the darkest of places; I am the planet's Knight Alexander' but I always did have a flair for the dramatic and wordy of things...

I am starting to really enjoy the flashbacks filling in Vincent's past, I do not remember the game (or any anime) being that well developed... but I haven't played the game in years so I just could be fogging the memory back there with the other hundred or so RPGs of my yesteryear ;)

Finally, keep up the good work, this is by far the best single Final Fantasy 7 fanfiction I have read through (Fanboys&girls notice the Qualifier... No Flamage [Omulet du Fromage... why did that pop into my brain?]) and well keep writing, you do a great job of it :)
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From DarkFae on January 12, 2006
NICE!! man, i just love the way you do materia! i dunno why, but vince using reno's weapon was really cool. he's really gotta thing for tifa now, huh? */grin* dood, u got me on edge!

-nev
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From ANON - Blanket Woman on January 12, 2006
Qustion. I just remembered this from Chapter Three.

�He must be nice to have around.�

Tifa, Vincent and Jeremiah all turned to look at Zet, who had said nothing this entire time. She backed off, scowling and said, �Just because he�s such a good mechanic and all. Sure the guy can fix just about anything.� Zet looked away, still scowling, crossing her arms.

Has Zet had a thing for Cid this whole freakin' time?

And then he--with the demotion argument--and omg! No WONDER! Hahahahahaha!
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From LadyE on January 12, 2006
I feel sorry for Zet because of how she reacts towards Cid. She doesn't seem Mary Sue to me at all, just really nervous/scared of Cid. Thanks for clarifying that Jenova thing. I feel sorry for poor Vincent too, but that is more due to me not liking Cloud, so... Looking foward to the next chapter!
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