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By : sephcounttheways

From ANON - Gismo on October 07, 2008
Damn, that was unexpected. But very good. I guess I'm pulling my hair out now until the next update. Ah...don't take those critics to hart that much. Your unique stile of writing is exactely what makes you stand out and makes this story ever so refreshing. It isn't like your everyday SephxCloud angst. That bores the hell out of me. No, you had the audacity to make Cloud the little punk bitch he is and were not scared to show a "normal" Seph with all his little imperfections and insecurities - and I fucking love you for it. Please don't ever think of re-writing this story. It would kill a lot of the spark.
On another note: I am very much hoping for more Vincent input in your story. Can't help it. I just love Mr. Broody-pants. I'm curious to see how your version of him ticks. So far I can safely say that I would like to kidnap him and chain him to my bedpost for some discipline ;) Did that sound weird? Hell...who cares *snickers* The girl in me wants to see some "family" bonding time... Oh well. You are doing so good, hun. Please keep it up.
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From CyNeko on October 03, 2008
Who cares if the sex scene was long, it was fucking good! I certainly hate short sex scenes that skimp out on the details (which this most certainly didn't, thank the lord!)
I seriously love this fic, it is one of my most fav Sephy x Cloud fics around. It has just that perfect mix of sweetness and humor and mindblowing hotness.
Can't wait for the next chapter.
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From CyNeko on October 02, 2008
I actually let out a little squeal of excitement when I read that last sentence...little Cloud actually has a more than decent chance with Sephy. Oh dear lord I can't wait to see what he thinks of Cloud's CD XD
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From ANON - laz on September 03, 2008
Yay, this is so cute.At first i wasnt sure if i liked the out of characterness, but it grows on ya. Update soon!!!
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From ANON - BlackRainCloud on August 23, 2008
*wipes a tear*

I... am truly happy, now. That chapter delivered EVEREEETHING I was hoping for. And just you know, long, ultra-descriptive love scenes are the effing BEST! It galls the shit out of me, when some random writer is getting into the good stuff, after building it up for three chapters, the characters are getting romantical, and then, and THEN..... It's like, kiss-remove-clothes-penetration-immediate-orgasm. All in three sentences.

Boo.

But! You, my dearest, have the skillz to craft an interesting plot (what's the net euphemism for "Page-Turner"? "Scrollbar Clicker"?) Your writing is finely crafted, fucken HILARIOUS, and the naughty bits are... um... distracting.... to say the least. (I had to go into the other room, cuz I woke up my sleeping boyfriend with all the long, drawn-out sighs and squeals of happiness.)

The day Blonde Ambition ends, I will throw my laptop off of the Sears Tower, because nothing will ever top this story.

so yeah.

LOVED IT LOVED IT LOVED IT LOVED IT!!!!!!
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From ANON - Elenna on August 20, 2008
this story is excelent!! I love it! I kept returning to see if it had been updated and was pleased to see that it had! Your idea of Rufus was one of most entertaining i have ever read!
On negative thoughts, I must be honest. I think it could have done without Cloud wanting breasts. Also asking about turning sperm into egg. It just isn't favorable to me, and I will not stop reading if somthing like that does happen, as I am THIS far into the story, it would be a little disapointing, though.

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From ANON - Komikitty on August 19, 2008
Huzzah! *dances happily* He didn't get hit on by Rufus, much. And Nobody died, for real. And there was really hot sex! Which was cute and made me laugh and wish I had a boyfriend. So in other words, YOU ROCK HUGELY! =^_^=
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From ANON - Soucree on August 18, 2008
For some reason, this is how I picture chapter 16:

Cloud: *comes running into his dorm* "CAM! Cam you won't beleive it!"
Cam: "Wha' the fawk?! Tell me!"
Cloud: "I found someone who's a bigger fag than me!"
Cam: "No shit! Who?"
Cloud: "Rufus Shina! He did my nails." *shows Cam*

I'll give a real review when my brain stops melting from the hilarity of Sephiroth and his pink...thingy.
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From ANON - Anon on August 18, 2008
*After re-reading it 4 times* I have to say, this chapter is well worth the wait^_^

I really feel for Zack( By chance is Zack going to become gay and shack up with Angeal?) lol OMG now the pink didldo is on the scene from the Grab machine.lol I love when Clouds eyes went from o.o to O//O lol

Great chapter, I'll be waiting in the shadows for next time^_^
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From ANON - Amanda on August 18, 2008
Ohhh dear. Oh dear, oh dear. o///o You get away from buttons before fucking break them! Gah, worth the wait? I DO BELIEVE. Best characterization of Rufus Shin-Ra? You bet your ass! How you got The Queen out of Rufus I'll never understand, but I'm pretty sure it's the mark of a genius/sexual predator. o_
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From Kiheki on August 18, 2008
OMG!! Rufus was......wow! And poor Cloud, when is Seph going to tell him about the Mako?? I hope Genesis comes back eventually, I wanna see Cloud get all territorial XD Your updates are always worth the wait!
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From ANON - secretwishes527 on August 11, 2008
freaking awesome.
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From ANON - Kathryn Reel on August 11, 2008
FINISH IT FOR FUCKING GODS SAKE PLESE FUCKING PLEASE.
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From ANON - Ajitsuke on July 27, 2008
Let me go ahead and start by giving a boring technical review.

You've been proofreading/editing the most recent chapters haven't you? Well played. Early on, your technique was a little rough and I noticed a lot of little errors here and there. Just stupid little things like typos and whatnot, sometimes an awkward sentence. But you had a good story and your use of descriptive language kept me intrigued.

Lately, though. Wow. Not only have your strong points improved, but your weak points have pretty much disappeared. Your style is a lot cleaner, typos are virtually non-existent and there's really nothing that distracts from the story anymore. I'm really impressed at how quickly things have changed between the first and most recent chapters. (technique-wise)

As for the story, wow. Just amazing. As a guy who grew up in a rural town, was closeted his whole life and then escaped to the big city to go to uni...and then came out, I find myself relating to Cloud and seeing a lot of my experiences and feelings played out by this blonde beauty. A friend of mine recommended this story to me because she said Cloud was exactly like me. She really meant personality-wise but as I read along, I found that he and I were a lot more alike than she realized.

I guess what you can take from that is this: congratulations on creating a very real gay character. ha ha.

But seriously, I can't tell you how much I appreciate the outstanding job you've done in creating a gay version of Cloud.

As for our beloved General. Having been with a couple of older fellas (professors!!) I can definitely say that our dear General is quite realistic as well. Kudos to you.

Okay, so. Sex scenes are just. Sweet fucking baby jesus. So beautifully descriptive that the boys seem to radiate from my computer screen directly into my mind's eye. I mean. Text never seemed so real?

If I had never had sex before, I could read this and feel like I'd lost my V-card. Does that make sense? Because I'm not really sure how else to put this other than reading your sex scenes makes me want to go out and fuck the consciousness out of someone. Fuck them right into a coma. Or so that they couldn't walk anymore. And I don't mean that in the crass, ooh, I fucked them so hard they couldn't walk straight for a while" manner but more like, I gave them an orgasm so powerful that it caused their brain to lose control over basic motor skills.

That is what you do to me. Couple that with the fact that Cloud pretty much IS me and you have yourself a story that's got me BEGGING for the next chapter.

So, definitely keep them coming and thanks for what you've done so far.

Jarrett
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From ANON - JapAngela on July 20, 2008
Hmmhmm... Very, very, extremely good. Well written, nice verbage and grammarness, quite muchly great wellness.

Aww, who the fuck am I kidding, I fucking LOVED IT! XD I love Cloud's attitude, I love his mom, I love Sephiroth, I love the whole music thing (I wanna listen to Anal Orgasm~!), I LOVED. EVERYTHING. It's even nice to look at your "chapter images" and stuff, those help me envision the story even better. Don't normally see that with authors.

Now, I'm just wondering where this story is going to go from here. Oh what do you have planned for Sephiroth and Cloud? Any dramas? Happiness forever? Hmmm hmm hmm!

And the little note at the end of this chapter, about the AIDs thing... Maybe you can give it to Seph, 'cept he was immune to it/his body healed itself, and he can be the cure for AIDs and all other diseases! ;D Juuuust... there are possibly suggestive ways to obtain the cure, which might only be available to Cloud (obvious), soo... there be a dilemma! Or not. lol, just suggesting crazy shit that shouldn't be taken into consideration, shared merely for possible shits and giggles. ^^

But... daaaamn I want to read more! :( But maybe you'll update with a new chapter in a few days, I'll check every so often (like every ten minutes! lmao jk) in hopes that there'll be something more!

Good luck with the rest of your writing, for I hope you don't overcome the dreaded WRITER'S BLOCK! that all authors fear. Believe me. They all fear it. Deep down. Somewhere. Yeah. I've been there before. It's some scary shit. Still is. Yep.

...I'll stop typing now. XD
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