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By : Savaial

From SavannahMarie on March 22, 2008
Ah, let the heeeaaaaling endure!

I'm glad that Hojo and Sephiroth are able to have this moment. Hojo will finally have his chance to face and comfort Sephiroth the Boy, and perhaps will be able to show him the Hojo Sephiroth the Man has come to know.
Might help close some doors for them both (I hope).
Someone toss the professor some more Tootsie Rolls - he's gonna need all the help he can get.

I was rather fond of Aerith's teensy weensy tantrum in the last chapter... That collective "Oh, CRAP" reaction she got outta the boys had me smirkin'.
Don't go 'round leavin' them Cetra chicks out da loop, yo - them bitches are crazy!

Also, don't think I didn't notice how unusually buddy-buddy Cloud got with Sephiroth during that shower. Oh, I saw it.. yessiree bob.
I think he wants to be friends. Aw.

I also can't help but wonder how the hell the adoption process will go concerning all these newly-rescued chitlins. I mean, all mental and physical anguish aside - how could one possibly fathom what they're getting into when they bring these Experiment Kids home?

"This here is little Josie.. she's five years old, loves animals, and turns into a hydra whenever she's feeling blue."

"Ah, and this handsome young man is Alex. He's undoubtedly psychotic, but you'll never have to feed him - no, dead serious! His entire digestive tract was removed as an infant."

"Don't be shy, Lily, say hi to - LILY! What did I say about pyrokinesis in the house?!"
And so on and so forth.

I'd personally like to think that the brother and sister Sephiroth freed will think of the General fondly in years to come.. The thought of vivid crayon drawings depicting a blood-drenched psychopath wielding a seven-foot sword on the fridge warms my heart.

I can't wait for your next chapter. You've done awesome.

-Savannah

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From Savaial on March 21, 2008
Thanks, Calanthee. I really want Sephiroth to have more dimensions, so it was nice to read your review. I decided to regress him in the worst place, too, which was mean of me� I�ll probably slow down a little with my posts because I�m starting to get more work now, but I won�t quit the story. Thanks for reading and telling me what you think; I need that sort of feedback. (I�m shameless for it.) ;-)

Sephcounttheways, sorry to make you cry! He�ll get better! I just want you to know I read Blonde Ambition and I loved it. I�ve never had so much fun reading a fic in my life. It didn�t matter you wrote Cloud and Sephiroth OOC, truly. You made me go with your interpretation so effortlessly.
Thanks for reading and reviewing my fic! It�s nice to come back after posting and find feedback. My little heart says, �Yah!�

stz, lol, TALKTALKPOORN has it�s place but I�m just not that kind of writer. I�ll admit I�m guilty of finding Seph Yaoi and eagerly devouring it, though. I love these liberated days of man sex, heh heh heh. But, to the fic, there will be sex in it and it�s not far from starting. I�m going slower with chapters now that work is coming my way more frequently, but I�m not stopping anytime soon.
Thank you for taking the time to tell me what you think of Paper Tiger Burning. I truly appreciate any and all feedback. It makes me want to work harder on the story, really.

Hunewearl, my job as a writer is to try and keep everyone either shocked or stimulated, else no one will want to read. I�ve read some stuff out there that made me want to fall asleep in my Cheerios. So anyway, the fact that I surprised you is good�for me� I�m sorry if it gigged you in an unpleasant way.
I tried to give clues of his instability and his fast approach to a breakdown, but maybe I was too subtle with it. I�ll go back and look through and see if I can make it clearer. If it confused or surprised you too much it probably did the same to other readers. I appreciate you telling me this prodded you a little too much. Without constructive criticism I can�t improve my writing!
Thanks for reading and reviewing! It�s like the chocolate Hojo gave Seph.

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From hunewearl on March 21, 2008
OMG!!! What a surprising turn of events! HE was just kicking ass and now he reverted back to childhood!?!?!?!? Dang! That's a very good twist and i can't wait to see what happens next. But if i may say, i was very, very surprised, it just seemed to happen. It might just be me, or maybe it was what you were aiming to do, but there was no buildup to this big cahnge of events or more like i didn't know the cause and the how of the amnesia as clearly as i can see them for your previous twists and turning points.
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From seidystz on March 21, 2008
wow that was quite a turn of things (the last chap). but looking forward what you make of it. i've been following every chap, every word and i'm looking forward to more chaps. i sure do hope you ain't planning on stopping. i just love how you write it, you leave the reader asking for more. i know i'm like "O.o what! end already! NO!" after every chap. i like how you take your time and don't rush things. it's not like all these other fics where it's "talktalkPOORN" and i seriously like that. to be honest i was really expecting things, between seph and aer, to get really hardcore, hence"talktalkPORN", but when i kept reading it and it just kinda went nice and slow i was really beginning to like the fic and resepect the author and nooooow i love the fic.

okei i got a little carried away here, but in short - make more and don't you dare stop. :D

stz ^^
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From sephcounttheways on March 21, 2008
My heart strings. So plucked.

I just have a little dirt in my eyes. Sand. Wind. Is there a draft in here? It blew in the dirtsanddebris.

:blinkblink:
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From RJaneyP on March 21, 2008
The stinking reek of memory past, and the foul treatment of the innocent makes poor Sephiroth regress... wow the scene was beautifully written covering all the senses. You're a great writer I wouldn't skip over a single word you type... you make our beautiful Sephiroth a person not just a mad killing beast.
Please don't end the story too soon, I'll be most unhappy.

G aka Calanthee, a fan... or I might need a little piece of Chocolate candy to keep for crying too!
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From sephcounttheways on March 18, 2008
I wish I could throw temper tantrums like that. Yay for her not squicking out at the death, gore, etc. Go Aeris.
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From Savaial on March 18, 2008
Savannah, trust me!

sephcounttheways, lol, Aerith's a great head-butt to Seph. You totally pegged the yaoi angle. I'm not averse to reading Seph with Cloud or Vincent, either. All those pretty men...yummy. Still, your description is a total crack-up. I loved it. Might have to do a cut-scene parody down the road sometime...

hunewearl, that's very flattering and made my morning. Less is more in many situations. Too bad I can't apply that to myself with other things... And I won't quit writing. I love to write. We have just a short way to go before I wrap this story up, but it won't be for awhile yet.

A big thanks to everyone who reads and reviews! I love feedback!

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From hunewearl on March 18, 2008
You know what? I think i know why i love your writing so much. It's not just that you possess a higher level of vocabulary, and that there are almost no grammatical errors, I've noticed what you do with simple sentences. Almost every chapter in this story contains pivotal sentences. They're short, simple, concise, yet so powerful. Please keep writing, so i can try to get even deeper into your writing, and the overall development of the story.
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From SavannahMarie on March 18, 2008
^^^^HAHAHAHA!!!! Oh my god!
That's just... awesome.
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From sephcounttheways on March 18, 2008
Seph! Cloud! Don't go crazy! Don't forget about the chillins!

I can't WAIT until Aeris sees the decimation. Seph's gonna have some 'splaining to do!

(BY THE WAY, if this was a yaoi story, this would be the part where they lose thier minds and start makin' man babies on the floor in the lab. Eldon videotapes while giving mild mannered, soft spoken direction : "Lower, sir. Lower. Nice. That's beautiful. Open your eyes, Cloud.", Reno balks but joins in for round two, and Valentine jerks it inside of his cloak. Just to let you know. In case you...need some inspiration for future chapters.. heheh :gets cut it half by Mesamune and then into quarters by Buster: ..Ow.)

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From SavannahMarie on March 17, 2008
Nuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu!!!!!!
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From Savaial on March 17, 2008
hunewearl, thank you! It was time for some sugar with that one chappy. Before the end we will have RST instead of UST, so be ready. And don't worry about Hojo and Aerith...;-)

Savannah, heh heh heh. Things will always go awry because I love to torture imaginary people. Some imaginary people just beg for it, too. So glad you're enjoying this, really. It makes me feel good to know you're sitting there, reading and happy.

On with the show!

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From SavannahMarie on March 16, 2008
Yes, let's!

It is rather funny how well they all work together. I like it.

A lot.

And Oh Crap, Aerith and Hojo! Drat those meddlin' kids! I do hope their "coming to the rescue" doesn't royally screw shit up.. although, on the other hand, I do have to admit I love it when things go awry.

You should totally post your next chapter, like, today (looks away guiltily).

Love-Love,
Savannah
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From hunewearl on March 16, 2008
OMG!, You posted up so many chapters, but i've finally caught up!!!!
I love the whole operations unit thing u got going on, but i hope that hojo and aerith don't get in the way, but instead start whooping as much child-knapping guard ass as the others. And that scene with Sephiroth and Aerith alone, OMG if u do any more, i dont know if my already melted heart can take it (But don't stop)!!!! Keep up the good work!!!!!
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