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By : Savaial

From Savaial on March 09, 2008
Thanks guys! I worked while gone so I could get you something up as soon as I got back. I appreciate your reading and reviewing, truly.
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From ArdwynnaMorrigu on March 07, 2008
Sure you can use the pic as a desktop! Or whatever else you might have in mind.
I love the evidence of Aerith's spine in this chapter. Very fitting, exactly what I wish some anti-Aerith types could see sometime, though I'll settle for not having them flame.
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From SavannahMarie on March 04, 2008
And I quote:
"..Just bring everything. While you�re there, check the automatic feeder for my goldfish."

It is a severe understatement to say that I laughed. I think I may have even cocked my head to one side and did the total Tim Allen Home Improvement thing.

I'm not even going to try and spell it out. I'm just going to hope you know what I'm talking about.

You just get deeper and deeper with all these scientific terms and high-end brain-prattling. Sheer craziness, woman... pretty little head with brains, indeed - and I mean you. It's good stuff, though. Interesting. The best part is that it remains enjoyable. I can't count how many fics I've read where the author will go off on ultra-intellectual tangents until they've morphed into freakin' escapades from which there is no hope of return. Sure it's all goodies on the sandwich, but there is such a thing as having too much to swallow.

You're good at balancing. I'm appreciative. You know this. Moving on.

FIVE FREAKIN' DAYS!??!? FIIIIVE?????

FUCKING-A, LOU!! CHRIST-ON-A-STICK! WHAT AM I S'POSED TO DO WITHOUT MAH CRACK-MOMMA!?!??

I shall sigh obnoxiously until your return from le pooch parade. Hmph.

Moving Thang is still going on. It wont be done 'til the end of the month. I'm sure to hang myself before then. It'll all be over before anyone knows it. Sweet of you to ask, though, Thank You.

Pipe's callin'. You hurry on back now, y'hurr? Safe travels to you.
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From Savaial on March 04, 2008
Chapter 34 will be my last chapter for at least five days. I'm going to a dog show in Marietta Ohio and won't be back until late Sunday. Sorry for the delay. I really don't want to go. But I will be taking a notebook. I don't think a dog show will be very inspirational but I'll try to write anyway.
I don't know how I'll deal with having to hand-write for a few days. I think I've forgotten how.
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From Savaial on March 04, 2008
Thanks Savannah! I couldn't resist a grandchild joke. I appreciate you think I've done okay on the balancing act. A lot of purists wouldn't want to see Hojo or Sephiroth with feelings. I do love writing their interactions. And it won't be too long before I put more sex in the story. ;-) Thank you for reading and reviewing, my dear! Have you managed to move yet or are you still in a holding pattern?

sephcounttheways, my vote is for Aerith, lol. Hojo is more of a cock-blocker... :-0 Look at Ardwynna Morrigu's link for the best illustration of all time.

Ardwynna Morrigu, thank you for the constructive criticism!

The longer Hojo is with Aerith the more he'll show some humanity. I make her out to be a super-healer in the effort to keep her on par with her companions. The perfume was something I put in to please myself, just whimsical desire for a detail...

Aerith being portrayed as just sugar and fluff does irritate me. I have played FF7 twice and I can't see where she's too fluffy. Sometimes the game dialogue for her was odd, but it was odd for all of them at times. (Word is out that Square Enix has finally capitulated to a remake of 7, btw)

Yeah, I know Seph's not as big as I make him out to be, but I had this...urge to write him that was for some reason so I just went with it. It doesn't help my perspective that most people draw him about nine feet tall, or at least it seems that way. He's listed as 6 feet, one inch tall in the game stats I think... I can't remember.

And yeah, we wouldn't find Aerith at Ajit, but I badly wanted a little shock to Sephiroth's system. He can't develop any relationship with Aerith (in my mind) until he faces what he did. He has to work for the sunshine and roses! I guess I should rewrite and fix that though. If it caused you to pause it will cause others to pause.

And I have a problem with dialogue. I love to write it to the exclusion of other detail and I love words a little too much. I would drive an ancient Spartan crazy.

I went to your link and when I did I laughed out loud. I'll be laughing for days. So good to see someone else's mind went down that slightly pervy road. I think the little smile is what does it for me. Smug. How did you get a sperm to look smug??!! I hope everybody who reads my fic takes a look at your illustration of Sephiroth's superiority. Can I use it for a background on my computer, please?

I've been looking through your gallery. You're talented! I have to say I love the stick figure story and the Military Bloopers best, though How To Stop A Fight is a priceless drawing that I'd love to frame and hang in my living room.
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From ArdwynnaMorrigu on March 04, 2008
That perfume sounds more intoxicating (and dangerous) by the moment, altering body chemistry and turning the wearer into a creature built for subtle seduction. No wonder it has such a price (and Seph's enjoying it fully, I see ^_~). It's still a little on the creepy side watching Hojo of all people help facilitate an actual love life, as opposed to plain breeding for scientific purposes. I suppose it's the least he could do for the son he punished for so long.

I completely understand your reasons behind wanting to write this story. The hunger for the people behind the polygons is common especially for the ones we don't see much of, like Sephiroth. Though personally I think some people must be willfully blind to think Aerith is just sugar and fluff (at least if they had a chance to play the game, many haven't these days). A few tiny details do throw me here and there (Seph's not THAT large, and Aerith's body wasn't in the same lake as Holy, unless you were going for an 'all waters run together' approach). The dialogue strikes me as a touch more formal and lyrically archaic than the tone of the game, but that works with the elements you've added in and helps create the atmosphere.

What I love best in this chapter though, is the drawing of Sephy's swimmer. I doodled one myself a while back in case you're interested. http://ardwynna-morrigu.deviantart.com/art/Super-SOLDIER-49127549
That's what he gets for having a tentacle alien for a 'mother'. ;D
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From sephcounttheways on March 03, 2008
Who is the biggest cocktease in this chapter? Seph, Aeris, or Hojo? BWA! The world may never know!

It's also fun to think that Sephy has super sperm. Might as freakin' well.
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From SavannahMarie on March 03, 2008
Weeeeeeee!!!!! GRAN'-BABIES!

Ahem.... Yet another glorious round! God I love all this Sephiroth/Hojo/Aerith interaction. They are entirely too interesting together. Just the right combination of danger, hilarity, and mush - You always manage to tug internally on something without laying it on too thick; I appreciate that (and admire it even more).

AND HOJO LIIIIIVES!! HE LIIIIIIVVVES!!! YES!

Oh man, and FINALLY, a hot scene between Sephiroth and Aerith! I don't care if they still had their clothes on, you've built this puppy up to the point where anything remotely dirty makes me start fanning my neck. I love it! It makes the whole thing that much more sweet - although I'm sure you're already aware of that, as it's no doubt entirely intentional.

You know I've got to hand it to you anyway.

Thanks for the updates,
Savannah.
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From Savaial on March 03, 2008
hunewearl, thank you!

I couldn't resist developing Hojo. He's the scientific mafia boss of Shin-Ra, influencing all the major characters in Final Fantasy 7. I don't know how much development I'll give others, but you can look for in-depth development of Sephy, Aerith and Hojo. As always, thank you for reading and reviewing!

Ardwynna Morrigu, thank you for reading and reviewing!

I'm glad you are enjoying my fic. This was a story I wanted to write so I could explore people who get treated as two-dimensional plot impetus. Sephiroth is the bad guy and we never see how he got to be that way. We see him as the mad man who slaughters all and I want more. And Aerith is treated like a goody-goody with no depth. Hojo, the reason for all the misery, the background Moriarity, is even less fleshed out than the previous two characters. He intrigues me. So, thanks for taking the time to tell me what you think. I use my reviews as inspiration to keep writing!

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From ArdwynnaMorrigu on March 03, 2008
This story is stunning, nothing less. Excellent narrative, insightful POVs, character reaction and growth and change to an underlying interesting plot, even minor cultural details that add to the depth of the social fabric. Opium dens? A priceless perfume? A home-brewed sleeping draught? There's something of an Old World decadence in all that. In addition you've managed the bloody impossible in making me actually sympathize with Hojo. I'm grateful and awed that you manage such a quick update rate because this truly is a pleasure to look forward to.
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From hunewearl on March 02, 2008
Wow! This chapter showed so much character depth, most people probably would have left hojo as a flat, static character, but you've made him dynamic and layered (lol, like shrek!). Props for that, please keep on writing! I cant wait to see how all the other characters continue to develop!
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From Savaial on March 02, 2008
I wouldn't make you live without Hojo, Savannah. I like him too. He's the reason for every sin in Shin-Ra, basically. That new wackjob scientist has nothing on our resident mad scientist. And now you know who put the cameras out. Hope you enjoy!
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From SavannahMarie on March 02, 2008
Ahhhh!! nuuuuuuuuu! Hojo!
I am severely upset. Call Aerith! She must heal him! I cannot live without Hojo!
I have no real idea who dunnit... though I seriously doubt Valentine. Whoever put out the apartment cameras, I imagine. Damn! Who is it!? That new wackjob scientist? Oh man I hope not.
(Grrrooaaan)
We wait!
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From Savaial on March 02, 2008
sephcounttheways, no, it wasn't Vincent. Intrigue afoot!
hunewearl, thanks. I won't make you wait too long for the cliffie resolution, I swear.

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From hunewearl on March 01, 2008
NOOO!!!!! CLIFFHANGER!!!!
OH I cant't wait till u write the next chapter, this story is progressing so well!
please, keep up the good work!!
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