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Reviews for My Dark Angel

By : trabeck89
  • From Kitsune3 on May 05, 2010
    I love the story! By the way, you have no clue how eerie it is to be listening to one winged angel then have sephiroth appear in the story all of the sudden. really creepy
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  • From Bulma on February 11, 2009
    Perhaps you might consider formatting your RP into story format? It's very hard to read as it is and the majority of people will take one look at this and hit the back button, leaving this story unread. It is possible that the two of you have a very fun plot going here, but I'm afraid that no one will read it simply because it looks so jumbled and badly formatted. Also, you might think on possibly taking a writing class to help with grammar, spelling, and punctuation; they make a big difference, trust me.

    Good luck.
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  • From ANON - Serisent on January 30, 2009
    First let me just say that I only skimmed a handful of chapters. From the little bit that I read, your characters were wildly out of character. I understand that they may have had a reason for behaving in such an OOC manner, but then your job as an author is to explain those reasons. Also, the script formatting makes it incredibly difficult to read. If you want to post an actual fanfic then my advice to you would be to make an attempt to translate your roleplaying into paragraphs.

    I'm sure that you have a decent base for a story, you just need to work at it to improve a bit more. I wish you luck with your future endeavors.
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