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By : Rina76

From brainfear on February 06, 2010
Crap, what an ending for this chapter! I wonder how Cate will receive Loz now, with what she's seen him doing. Please post more soon! I love this!

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From hunewearl on May 24, 2009
Yes! Loz finally gets laid! It was a pretty funny start but it gets intense soon. I'll be waiting for your next update!
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From ANON - Silent Doll on May 23, 2009
Oh dear god, FINALLY!
The long awaited smutty chappie where Loz gets to screw Cate into HappyLand is up!
-cheers and sends you a truck of chocolate-
Oh yes, I lub teh Candy and Chocos =D
-steals more from L as Yazoo seduces him-
What IS L doing in the FFVII( AU ) Universe, anyway?
Oh yeah, and sorry for the late review, again >_>
-sends you another truck of candy and sweets and chocolates-
I hope this makes up for it! ^-^

Okay now, on to the review =D

Ah, I just love the moment where Kadaj is trying to glare daggers/ swords at Cate, but she merely reponds unaffected with a smile and a Eff you finger =D I like how she's just unafraid of Kadaj and is not some meek and submissive OC you see all over the place =D

I don't know if I have told you this, but I love your OC for how human and real she is. While other people have characters made out of words and paragraphs, I feel that your OC is so well thought out that she isn't just a bunch of words; the words fleshes her right out and she feels real =D Congrats for getting my approval and attention- I'm a very picky reader >_>

Oh, and hells yes, I loved the... hot part of the chapter, and the thought of Loz apologising for his Great Weapon just made me want to laugh and the pat him before giving him a hug. Poor guy does need Cate to get him to see himself in a whole new, brighter light. Either that, or clean to mirror in which Loz had been looking at himself all this time. Loz needs lotsa Luvin' =D (-Is stating the obvious- OTZ)

Loz backing Cate into the wall was hot, hot ,hot -pants in wanton want- Ahem ;)

What I liked most about The Scene was the mixture of raw fucking and romance, impatience and patience. My perfect cup of cu- tea =D

Okay, as you can tell, I'm bad at giving reviews, but I swear I tried my best for this. You deserve my effort for such a great,extra-long chappie to which you worked extra-hard at =D

Silent Doll
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From schwaerze on May 16, 2009
Oh, you think it was Kadaj on the other end of the line when Loz got that call in the church? Hm, I can imagine that it could be Yazoo as well, and I hoped ACC would enlighten me, but well... We�ll never know.

Now on to the long awaited new chapter:

Hahaha, naiv little Loz *shows him 'protection'-thingy* I had expected him to go to Yazoo for the condom though, he seemed reasonable enough to me to have one and to not bother Loz with a lecture... But Lozzy probably didn�t want to disturb him^^

Gaaaaah, the Yazoo/L scene almost did it for me already (can�t I bribe you in doing a full smut scene? *puppy eyes*) XDDD

Heh, Reno plays with fire. Again. He can�t seem to leave it alone, I love that about him ;)

Ah, interesting that Loz is being offended by being called queer. He does know that his brothers are gay/bi, does he? Does he think that�s not right, is he even disgusted by their relationship?

Hm, Cate gets bold already, claiming to be the owner of that 'dog'^^ But I guess Loz doesn�t mind anyway, he seems to have fallen for her completely already.(I think it�s okay here, since Loz seems to be that character that can be very obedient once he trusts someone and you manage to not drift into the Mary-Sue trap. Keep a close eye on that so you won�t accidently slip into it ;))

(Now I have a question: is this pre-, post- or AU AC?)

Gah, I never thought I�d say that but the hetero smut was sooooo hawt XDDD I cae to a point where I found hetero parings boring, but you convinced me otherwise *bows*

happy-gasm- what a word :D

Loz apologizin for being so big almost had me rolling on the floor! Poor (lucky) guy...

Again, I am speechless and you certainly proved to me that it wasn�t boring at all!!! Thank you!
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From ANON - Lunatic Angel/ Silent Doll on April 27, 2009
Yay!!! An UPDATE!!!!

Finally!!!

-reads-

H-h-hold up!

Is that L from Death Note I spy?

Barefoot, touching Yazoo with his finger tips, chewing on his fingernail...

That sounds impossibly like L.

0.o

Then again, it maybe a mistake I'm making. Oh well.

Wait, what, a pressie for Cate from Lozzie...

Ah, the sweetness =D

And oh, Loz gettin' Jealous, eh?

I agree with Cate, that's cute =3

Hold on, what the hell did Kadaj do to the girl?

-hopes to find out soon-

Ooooooh the kiss, I loved how you discribed the kiss between Cate and Loz.

It was hot =D

Overall, a great chapter =D It's getting me excited for the next cause of the little questions you put in my head.

Me wants to see how this fic moves along.

So update when you can, kay?

It's cruel to keep me waiting! -pouts-

&&&& Loz, clothes off, NOW!!!!

I reviewed =3

Lunatic Angel/ Silent Doll

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From hunewearl on April 26, 2009
ahhhhh! Cliffhanger! Great chapter, Loz is such a big teddy bear. I can't wait for your next update!
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From schwaerze on April 25, 2009
Hahaha, I know exactly what you mean about feeling all ladylike with the big muscular guys XD (Vin Diesel�s gay btw- but I guess Loz�d be pretty indifferent to that...) YAAAAAY, I get pissy Yazoo!!! After ACC there is probably nothing that can make him look OOC anymore, squeenix already did that and butchered his character, so you can probably get away with anything now anyway.

Awwwwww- the 'pick a hand' thing is so cute and so Loz like! A bit childish, but so well meant!!

�What�s the matter? You don�t like pink? I can get you a blue one.� - Haha, is that a pun on the girls-pink/boys-blue thingy? I thought that Cate had some rather tomboyish traits, and maybe Loz thinks so too?

LOL about Loz�s ringtone XD It�s the one from AC and the game, I suppose?

WAAAAAAAAAAH!!! Yazoo trying to blend in with the wall? Yeah sure, that�s like Bahamut Sin trying to hide in a nutshell XD Chrchr, you go Yazzy- ignore all the stupid fangirls. But my, he must have the patience of a saint to endure all the squealing and drooling and 'accidental' touching...

Oh good god, Loz IS a dreadful liar! I had such a clear image in my head reading this: Loz avoiding eyecontact, pursing his lips and almost squirming saying 'No'!

�I wish. He�d never leave Yaz and I on our own, though. Thinks we can�t survive without him giving us instructions every ten minutes.� LMOA. *cellphone goes off, Kadaj grunts imperiously* 'Breath Loz, breath. Just don�t forget to breath. I�ll call again in ten minutes to remind you again to breath. Bye.'

Ah, Loz calling Cate 'little girl' was heart warming, after all the sad things she told him. I feel a bit sad for Cate now, but apparently she has become a fine girl still!

Now I so believe that the bartender is Zack... (Please be Zack, please be Zack! Ehhh... But then this wouldn�t make much sense, would it? He must be dead already... Unless this is AU.)

"and I give a silent blessing to the Gods for putting so many pretty boys on this planet for me to perve on...I mean, appreciate the beauty of." -Thanks squeenix, my new religion! (for creating all the bishies^^)

�I dunno. Get me something purple.� - Hehe, what kind of order is that? She must be pretty wasted^^ I�m wondering what Loz was drinking...

Heh, I wouldn�t be too prone talking about my parent if it happened to be a crazy, chopped off alien head... I�m with you Loz!

Hm... Cate doesn�t know about mako-eyes, does she? All soldiers and everyone who got infected with mako gets those shiny, radiant eyes. Since Sephiroth was SOLDIER he has it and hence his remnants have them as well.

Loved the desription of Loz, you got him so well! (Like every character from the FFVII world btw^^)

Aw damn Cate for being clumsy and ruining the kiss XD

YAAAAY!!! Yazoo found someone to dance for! *drools* And ew for the barefoot- but then Cate�s right, the poor guy�d be too mesmerized by Yazoo to even notice a rocket starting next to him XD ...................... (insert squealing here, my brain just ceased to function *re-reads dance scene and the vampire-fairy tale part*)

Oh. What did Kadaj do? Sucking out her energy or something? Now that would be an interesting plot advance...

Yay, Kissing! Amazingly described too!

Ah, you�re naughty to finish it there^^ Please, please update soon? *wants the public restroom scene*
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From ANON - Lunatic Angel/ Silent Doll on March 28, 2009
Lol.
Yes. Cate as a Forensic Pathologist.
Loz and his brothers being the ones that sends her 80% of the bodies that she examines ^_^
That would be funny, in a weird way, if you think about it, lol.
Still, I do like Cate being a flower girl too!
It's actually a really good idea. It sort of, I don't know, fleshes her out and makes her character and person believable.
If Loz pisses her off in the future, she can just lock him in her shop ^_^

It's kinda touching/ sweet/ nice that Loz doesn't give a damn about the stripper and is more interested in Cate. It IS really good for Cate's ego!

Loz: "I gotta go take a pi-" -corrects himself- "Uhm... I mean, go to the bathroom. Excuse me for a minute."

Awwwh! What a gentleman ^_^

Ohhh, and Kadaj all getting aggressive-protective over his big brother is just simply great to see- I can't help but like that side of him. You portray him really, really well!

I also love the way you portray Yazoo- all calm, unaffected and yet reasonable.

Over all, I love this chapter, just like I do the others- Just, sorry for reviewing late >_
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From ANON - hunewearl on March 26, 2009
awesome concept for a story! I'm really liking it! I hope you'll update soon!
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From schwaerze on March 22, 2009
Ah, I always thought that too... Delivery boy?... uh.

I do not like Aeris either, as you have certainly noticed by now... But that�s not to say that I don�t like flowers or florists^^ It�s just that I always forget to water plants and so they all died.

It�s so good to see that Loz is actually having fun (that doesn�t involve beating something bloody). He so deserves it. Go Cate!

I bet Loz would go all crazy about 'Rambo' and that stuff, yes? Kind of suits him... Hehehe, and he likes Metal... Wahaha, Loz I love you!!! (Funny, I always thought that Loz was someone who would listen to Trash Metal and Hard Rock, while Kadaj seemed more of the Punk guy. Yazoo would definitely like Black Metal and Classic.) AND I must admit I thought that Loz would actually enjoy sugar. Probably because he is a bit childish sometimes... But salt is fine too!

Awwwwwwwww, Lozzy! He�s going to cry XD

Yay, Yazoo is stalking poor Cate! And he�s drinking wine... I think he would. Just can�t imagine him with anything else, really. And I guess, he�ll never get rid of the 'being stoned'-joke as well, eh? XD But he really sounded kinda high in the english version -.-

Hehe, the reason of Cate concerning the impossibility of Kadaj and Yazoo making out had me giggle like mad here^^

And woah, Kadaj is scary, I was almost shocked to read that he was suddenly standing beside Cate! he�s really talky, I bet he gets off on his own voice. But he has a nice voice... :) Pffff, boy, he�s over confident XD But I really like that under all that viciousness he�s just trying to protect his brother and shield him from a sad experience.

Hm, I think Kadaj and Yazoo have a rather open relationship, haven�t they? He�s talking about Kadaj fucking some whore so calmly... I somehow really hope we see him snap. I want to see a pissed Yazoo. Pretty please? *puppy eyes*

Really LOVED that chapter, since we got a closer look at all the brothers personalities (which you presented most awesomely again, btw!)and the beginnings of their relationships with Cate!
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From ANON - SilentDoll on March 20, 2009
YAY!!!
It's yet another update for this delightful fanfic of yours!
-dances-
Anyway, god, do I love a protectively aggressive Loz- you really portray him only too well- me likes!
The scene of him glazing possessively at Cate while holding her hips as she danced for him was both hot and all like- awwwh~!

Ohh, and just so you know, when Loz asked Cate what she worked as, and before I moved on to the next sentence, I had a very weird feeling that she might ironically be a Forensic Pathologist or some such thing... o.0 I wonder why? =X

Loz should smile more. =D

SilentDoll
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From schwaerze on March 14, 2009
Hehe,I hope you do, insert many more girl jokes about Yazoo, because personally I find them hilarious^^ Ah, and you saw right through me, damn it *mutters under her breath about holding things*

Awww, poor Lozzy... she told you it�s a ladies drink, didn�t she?!

... omg Loz. Sometimes it�s just better to stay quiet... But him being proud of how efficiently they kill is kinda cute, in a morbid way.

"Like, being a delivery boy or something." *cracks up* Cloud might be inclined to disagree with that.

HAHAHA, Cate�s a florist! So cool :D She�d probably a lot to talk about with a certain flowergirl... I�m just wondering how Loz�ll deal with it, since he doesn�t like flowers in AC... But his reaction was just too funny XD

Hm, if I was Cate and someone�d grab my ass and I had someone like Loz with me I�d certainly have done the same. She�s probably feeling quite powerful now, isn�t she? Even though it�s only borrowed strenght.

Hehe, Loz being afraid to dance is so adorable^^

Another great chapter that brought the two characters together in a plausible, nice pace and I can�t wait to see more of them! (I�m wondering what Kadaj and Yazoo are up to in the meantime, though. And how will they take Cate?)
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From SilentDoll on February 27, 2009
-Huggles poor Loz-
Of course there will be people who would want to talk to you!
And LOLETH at the mental image of Loz doing a droll stare at her dance!
-roflol at the thought of it-
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From ANON - schwaerze (too lazy to loggin) on February 23, 2009
Alright, I�ll shoot you if you ever do the giggly girl think *sneaks velvetnightmare and unlocks safety* I�m ready, get it on! (Though I have the suspicion that this will not happen anyway. But always wanted to hold velvetnightmare *shrugs*)

Haha, poor Yazzy, he�ll just never escape the girl jokes XD That was a good one!

Awwww, Loz is so cute ^_____^ Turning around to see if really he was meant... Stupid fangirls with their Loz-hating attitude have made him unsure of his own sexyness. Poor baby *hugs*

OOOOh, and Reno�s there too! That�s so him, taking advantage of a flustered girl to get himself free drinks^^

"In general, I�ve found that men aren�t too bright when it comes to us girls and often miss the signals and hints we give them, even if they�re huge frickin� obvious ones and if I hang around waiting for this dude to make the first move it might never happen. And then I�ll never get laid." ROFLMAO!!!! She has some priorities, alright!

Oh my... pooooor Loz doesn�t believe someone could be interested in him :(

�Uh...Loz,� he eventually reveals. �With an �L�. Short for Loz.� - OMG Loz XD He�s such a cutie^^

Okay I�m switching between squealing and feeling sad for little Lozzy, but the whole conversation is so awesome!

"I ain�t leadership material. I don�t have the smarts for that. Although Yaz does � plus he�s a deadly force not to be messed with, but he�s too quiet and easy-going to order us around.� -I really liked that description. That�s exactly how I imagined them to be and why Kadaj would take the role as their leader.

Say- that porcupine blue-black haired barkeeper wouldn�t be Zack, would he? I was wondering about that since the last chapter but forgot to ask...
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From SilentDoll on February 08, 2009

Yep, you got it right! Another admirer of Loz(ohsoveryverysexy)-ass!
And yeah, let's start a the Lozohsosexy club!
The poor guy isn't loved enough just because he isn't pretty like Yazoo or Kadaj and because "he is bigger and more masculine than his brothers" (I agree with your character at that point)
If I ever hear that Justine call Loz "big ugly one", I'll be /making/ her big and ugly with some unspeakable torture method. Kidding =)I know It's just fan fiction.
But Loz is NOT ugly!
Sheesh!

Now that Loz has eyes on your character...
I'm wanting more chappies!

Lunatic Angel/ Silent Doll

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