Click Here!

  • 1

Reviews for A Dream Come True

By : Serenity85
  • From SoulMore on August 06, 2012
    FAN!~
    Report Review

  • From ANON - Anon on August 07, 2009
    Hi again. I just wanted to give you an example of what I meant in the previous review. I would divide the text in the following way:

    Rude woke up moaning softly in the middle of the night all sweaty and, well, sticky. He was dreaming. About Reno. Again. "What the hell is happening?!" For the past few nights he dreamed the same dream. But why? He had no idea. Sure, Reno was his partner for few years now, and he cared about him as a friend despite him always being annoying, arrogant little pest. It was even appealing, it suited him good. So Rude came used to it. He couldn't but smile when he thought of him, always getting into trouble, always blurting out things he shouldn't... It was real fun to be around him.

    Rude cleaned himself up, and got out of the bed. He wandered through his apartment; there was no chance he could sleep now... He went to his living room and froze. TV was on, and he could see a silhouette sprawled on his couch. He immediately recognized a soft glow of red entouring his visitor's head.

    "What are you doin' here?"

    Reno jumped startled, turning to see Rude standing there and staring at him curiously.

    "Thought ya were asleep!" He saw something was different about Rude. He looked almost embarrassed. "What's wrong?"

    "Oh, nothing...you've just...surprised me..."




    Okay, that's enough from me. *LOL*

    Take care

    Report Review

  • From ANON - Anon on August 07, 2009
    Hi there, I just read this story and I ahve to say it was a nice little piece. I like the interaction between Reno and Rude and of course, who wouldn't want to wake up in the middle of the night and find Reno in the living room. :) I ahve a slight suggestion to your text and that is to perhaps make more space between you dialogs and narrator text just to make it easier to read. Otherwise it was a good short-story. :) Thank you and keep up your work.
    Report Review

  • 1
T.O.S. | Content Guidelines | DMCA Info | F.A.Q. | Facebook | Tumblr | Abuse | Support | Contact | Donate

Click Here!