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Reviews for Darkened Skies

By : Cynthia
  • From ANON - Atasi on September 17, 2012
    So...I just realized that chapter 30 has the "Fanfiction net" disclaimer at the top. Is the version you posted here the same as the "censored" version you posted on ff.net? Just curious. Either way, I still thoroughly enjoyed the last chapter. :)
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  • From Pyro-Life on September 17, 2012
    I absolutely loved this! When i read Ashen Skies over on ff.net, I had wished to know exactly why Gaia felt threatened (yes you did say why but Im a 'give me all the details' kind of girl) and then you started this snd I was soooooooo happy! You're an amazing writer, hun. Keep it up, and fuck the haters.
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  • From ANON - Atasi on September 17, 2012
    GAH, I LOVE THIS STORY!!!

    Seriously, I am going to have to come back, read your works in more detail, and give you better reviews. (-_-)...

    Until then, please accept my gushing praise on how much I love your stories! I teared up when Zack fell apart in Angeal's arms, and I burst out laughing when Zack told Angeal and Genesis to keep it down. Love, love, love this story!
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  • From ANON - Atasi on September 12, 2012
    Bah, I'm dumb... so sorry, but I meant to thank you for changing your formatting! It makes it so much easier on my poor little eyes. :)

    Yes, this is why I am reviewing again... (-_-)... But, again, thank you!!! (^_^)
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  • From ANON - Atasi on September 11, 2012
    Stressful day at work and what do I find? You updated AGAIN! Oh, this so totally made my day! Now...off to read your update (I know, I reviewed before I read Ch. 26...)! (^_^)
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  • From ANON - Atasi on September 10, 2012
    Okay, so I have been HORRIBLE about reviewing each chapter... I really wish I had time to do so - as it is, I'm lucky if I can skim your work before having to run off to real life... For that, I do want to apologize. I am seriously going to try and make time (sometime down the road maybe...?) to sit down and properly READ this fic (and the sequel, Ashen Skies). Then, perhaps, I can give you the type of review you deserve.

    Anyway, enough of that. Since I skimmed and didn't properly read the last three chapters you just posted, I have to say that I'm going to be a bit fangirl-ish in my review. Here goes:

    OMG, OMG, OMG! You posted THREE chapters in a row! *SO EXCITED - does a happy dance!* As always, I love the way you write, and I love the way you portray the characters. I honestly think out of all the fan-made works I've ever read, you do the best job of making it feel like I'm just reading an extension/alternate reality of the actual game, using the exact same characters from the game. So often, I feel like authors take their own liberties with how they portray characters (I'll admit, I'm guilty of that myself...). Ah, I just love your work. I look forward to reading more from you!

    Maybe after re-reading your works, I can give you a bit less fangirl craziness and some constructive criticism to help you better your writing. *(^^)*
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  • From ANON - Atasi on August 24, 2012
    AH! You updated! Bah...I'm going to have to finish reading all the other chapters before I can get to chapter 21...

    Okay, I can't promise to review EVERY chapter, but I am going to do my darnedest to do so. Not enough people review, and being the lurker that I tend to be, I'm guilty of that as well... (-_-)... Well, that being said, on with the review of chapter one!

    I absolutely love the flashback at the beginning of this story. If I remember this story from when I read it a while back (which HAS been a while), I remember thinking that this beginning part with the flashback was one of my favorite parts. As for your interpretation of Genesis' and Angeal's characters, I must admit that they have become my go-to characterizations for the two of them. I love how Angeal, even as a child, has as much patience as he does, even when dealing with a snob like Genesis. I also enjoyed how Genesis' pride really showed during their conversation. Also, the whole bit about Genesis insisting that Angeal recite plays with him made me smile.

    I am no writer myself, so I can't really give criticism (constructive or helpful or...otherwise) on your writing style. However, from the view of someone who just likes to read, your narrative flows very well. I never felt like there were any jarring moments that "threw me out" of your story. Now, as for the formatting, I do have this to say: (and this may be me just being a bit nit-picky, but) Because I'm reading this on a computer screen, the indents at the beginning of each paragraph seem to be a bit out of place. Indents make sense to me in a book because there aren't usually spaces between paragraphs, not like how fan fiction tends to be formatted. You already have an extra line separating each of the following paragraphs/phrases, so it seems a bit strange to me that you formatted your story with indents at the beginning of the following paragraphs. Again, this may be just me being a bit nit-picky, but I thought I'd point it out.

    Now, off to try and read more of this so I can catch up to your most recent post!
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  • From ANON - Atasi on August 21, 2012
    OMG, OMG, OMG, thank GOODNESS I found this! I need to stop being such a lurker... (-_-)... I followed your fanfiction on ff.net for the longest time. Then, I decided to take a break for a while and lo, and behold, ff.net decides to start censoring stuff, and without me even knowing about it (being the silly lurker that I am), writers and/or ff.net delete stories/accounts. I almost had a heartattack when I went to check if you had updated this story on ff.net (by clicking on it in my "favorites" tab), only to have an error screen show up, saying the story could not be found.

    Thank you for posting all the links on your profile, or I really think I may have shed a tear over having not been able to read your work. I really enjoy your writing, and I am so glad to see you are still working on this piece.

    Now, I must go re-read (since it's been WAY too long since I've read this)...so it may take a while before you see another review from me, but rest assured, I WILL review. :)
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