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Reviews for The final fantasy.

By : deathnibbler
  • From deathnibbler on February 23, 2007
    I'll embarrasingly admit that my use of the semicolon is incorrectly used constantly, after over-viewing the story again. I obviously do not get the correct usage of the symbol, therefore I apologise for the incorrectness of the usage.
    Though in my defence I am not a professional writer or editor, and this story was written atleast 2 1/2 years ago, I just recently found it again and decided to post it for the fun of it. I didn't read over it again.
    Considering I am not a man myself, my 'babble' of two men having sex could be quite inaccurate, perhaps next time I should word-for-word a gay porno so I can get it EXACTLY described two men having sex just like they're supposed to?
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  • From Starstop on February 22, 2007
    I like this story...keep it up!! i like this paring they are one of my fav's.
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  • From Sharon20 on February 21, 2007
    It’s certainly an interesting oneshot, if only mildly clichéd. There are some grammar issues, which I think are rather basic and unacceptable for anyone old enough to be on this site. Your constant use of the semicolon baffles me since you didn’t use it correctly even once. I wanted to point out that you mentioned Seifer being 6ft, when he’s actually 6’2” (the tallest character in the game next to Ward and Raijin, not counting the inhuman.) I’m very nit picky about little details like that, so please disregard it if you couldn’t care less about getting every single fact right. Other than some typos, I’d say it’s a decent drabble, if only a bit unrealistic. I’m referring to your description of actions, which seemed odd, as though you didn’t have the first clue how two men were supposed to have sex. Practice makes perfect though, so keep writing and getting better. I'll give you three stars for the effort and because you've done my favorite pairing.
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