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Reviews for The Beginning is the End...

By : YourBeautifulNightmare
  • From ANON - Cee on May 29, 2013
    Oh no, no more chapters! You are doing great, keep it up!
    I'll be checking back soon! ; - ;
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  • From Faoiltierna on April 30, 2011
    More of Reno is always good :-) Has he and Cloud spoken since the test at all?

    Zack not talking to Angeal is good...poor boy!

    Wonderful chapter! I look forward to more! :-)
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  • From Faoiltierna on January 17, 2011
    Oh, Cloud and Sephiroth having breakfast together is just love :-) And the way they fast talked together...ah, nothing like an attempted assassination and several fights to the death to really bring you close to another person!

    I do so enjoy this story! Thank you for the update! Hope you don't mind...but I'm already eagerly awaiting the next chapter! *grin*
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  • From Faoiltierna on December 13, 2010
    Heh heh. Good chapter! Cloud and Sephiroth freaking out the other SOLDIERS was fun!

    And yes, Vincent smacking himself was very enjoyable :-)

    I had the utmost faith in Zack! I look forward to seeing how he did it :-)
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  • From Faoiltierna on December 08, 2010
    I cannot believe I missed the last update! Cloud drunk on Mako, kissing Sephiroth? Woo!

    And Sephiroth is strangely absent from this chapter...I'm sure he had good reasons and wasn't just still dwelling on the kiss...right? *grin*

    Scarlet = Evil!

    Excellent chapter, love your Genesis :-)
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  • From Faoiltierna on November 23, 2010
    I loved that Genesis had a ringer in the group! And that he recognized that Dewite was fighting for him, not against Genesis :-) Very cool!

    Yay, Zack finally lost his temper and is finally showing some Leadership! I've a feeling that being able to handle those two will be like getting a "B" in an honors course...with someone easier he'd get an easy "A" but this is more impressive *grin*

    Can't wait to see what happens next! Especially with Angeal and Genesis trying to use Hollander against Hojo, when Hollander has already been neutralized by the MadMan!
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  • From Faoiltierna on November 16, 2010
    Ooo! Just started reading...I'm hooked now :-)

    Sephiroth...why, if he has memories of before, is he allowing Hojo to inject him with that garbage? He's being influenced again, isn't he? Maybe some more electricity would help?

    I like Genesis's tests...nice that Cloud sees them for what they really are. I'm shocked that so many of the others didn't! Guess that's why they were being weeded out though :-)

    The quote of Reeve was priceless :-) Yay!

    Looking forward to the next installment!
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  • From Dreamfool on November 08, 2010
    You've changed this quite a bit. It's even better good job. I wonder what will happen when Cloud realizes that Seph has his memories too. I so look forward to that conversastion.
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  • From Dreamfool on June 08, 2010
    OMG poor Cloud. Although you can't really blame Seph either. This little blonde nobody has beaten his ass twice and he finally has the chance to get some pay back. Granted it hasn't happened yet, at least not in this reality.

    I love how in your story Sephiroth is the one to go back in time. You are absolutely right, we are just insignificant specs to the planet. He's just as important to those battles as Cloud. My favorite line so far: 'I was being controlled by an emotionally unbalanced space alien that claimed a birthright over me when she must have been dead centuries prior to my birth. How in Gaia’s name did that happen?' Because that is exactly how I see it. If Jenova hadn't taken over Sephiroth I don't think he would have been a bad guy. I look forward to more.
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  • From Madisuzy on May 12, 2010
    ROFLMAO!!! I loved Sephiroth tripping Cloud! That was priceless! LOL! Poor little Cloud. He'll be terrified if he finds out... and with Seph teaching his class for a week... oh my god... LOL! I can't wait for the games to begin! Great story and loving all the character interactions with each other.
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  • From sephcounttheways on April 30, 2010
    This is NOT a poorly written story by any means, but it is extremely hard to follow. Do you have a beta reader? I'd recommend getting one, and if you have one now you should probably find someone else. Preferably someone who is not an FF7 fan and can offer you some objective advice.

    As it is, I can offer a few suggestions for improvement : 1 - Use the character's names more often in paragraphs, I honestly had no idea who was speaking and/or being referred to most of the time. 2 - Assume that we're completely ignorant about everything in your story. Pretend you're writing for someone who has never played FF7 games or watched Advent Children, and describe everything and everyone from scratch - it helps with our understanding. 3 - Thoughts should be clearly labeled as thoughts - preferably in italics and in a new paragraph.

    And that's my two cents! Good luck, rock on, and don't ever stop writing!
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