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April 21, 2004 at 12:00 AM
the characters are ooc...but since you haven't played the game, it is understandable that you do not know the characters too well.
First off, Vincent Valentine is portrayed to be a rather weak/submissive character in your fic. Note that Valentine is an ex-assassin; you will never catch him begging. He is a very disciplined character and very mysterious (at least that's the aura he gives out ^__^) not to mention he acts serious and is rather monotone (through out the game, he never joked. The way he spoke to others was very formal and polite.)
I would suggest that you do a little research about the character's past because it's really really interesting and too long for me to write.
Main things that you do need to know:
When Vincent is injured, he turns into a monster named Chaos that will destroy anything and everything in site. This means that Sephy can just forget about hurting Vinny since he'll be cut into ribbons before that'll happen.
Vincent's dna has been screwed around by Hojo (once again, research that). This meahat hat he is not entirely human...he possesses extra strength, speed etc. This means that Vinny's not gonna sit around and act vulnerable; he's gonna retaliate and cause some damage.
Vincent also carries a gun, ALWAYS. I don't think Sephy's gonna try to attack a professional sniper when said sniper is fully armed and dangerous (not to mention with a dead aim.)
Also interesting fact: It is arguable that Sephiroth is in fact Vincent's son O__O
I STRONGLY suggest you research about the characters.
First off, Vincent Valentine is portrayed to be a rather weak/submissive character in your fic. Note that Valentine is an ex-assassin; you will never catch him begging. He is a very disciplined character and very mysterious (at least that's the aura he gives out ^__^) not to mention he acts serious and is rather monotone (through out the game, he never joked. The way he spoke to others was very formal and polite.)
I would suggest that you do a little research about the character's past because it's really really interesting and too long for me to write.
Main things that you do need to know:
When Vincent is injured, he turns into a monster named Chaos that will destroy anything and everything in site. This means that Sephy can just forget about hurting Vinny since he'll be cut into ribbons before that'll happen.
Vincent's dna has been screwed around by Hojo (once again, research that). This meahat hat he is not entirely human...he possesses extra strength, speed etc. This means that Vinny's not gonna sit around and act vulnerable; he's gonna retaliate and cause some damage.
Vincent also carries a gun, ALWAYS. I don't think Sephy's gonna try to attack a professional sniper when said sniper is fully armed and dangerous (not to mention with a dead aim.)
Also interesting fact: It is arguable that Sephiroth is in fact Vincent's son O__O
I STRONGLY suggest you research about the characters.
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April 21, 2004 at 12:00 AM
This was really good. I liked it alot and the characters were in a believable situation adn the characters were really close to normaut, ut, and this is a small but mind you, you really need someone to beta this and the rest of your wonderful work. I found a bunch of errors. and Sephiroth's hair is silver, platinum if you will. If you need someone toi beta your work, I would be more then happy to.
My e-mai alr already listed.
My yahoo screen name is: sephirothisnumberone and every now and then weilderoftheblackmateria
I'm also on aol, though not that much, my main is yahoo.
anyhoo, my aol screen name is: evilchu1
im me, or e-mail me. I'd love to beta your work.
~CrystallineTears~
My e-mai alr already listed.
My yahoo screen name is: sephirothisnumberone and every now and then weilderoftheblackmateria
I'm also on aol, though not that much, my main is yahoo.
anyhoo, my aol screen name is: evilchu1
im me, or e-mail me. I'd love to beta your work.
~CrystallineTears~