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soooo-good.plz-write-more!!

Currie told me to read this.
I'm not a SEifer/Zell fan.. not at all.

But, your writing is soo good... I liked it.
I also want to know who Zell was thinking about.

Maybe you can give Squall someone.. like Irvine... so he won't stay mad at Seifer.

Good story. And although I agree with you that using a condom is extremely important, bois in fanfics don't always need one ^_~

YAY! A SeiferxZell fic, you need to write more.
Liked the headmaster Cid image, i have thought maybe Headmaster and Squall but maybe that's just me.

One small thing, you don't have to pay any attention this is just my opinion. I never saw Zell as a neat person, maybe neat if trying to impress someone but then the sort of guy
that has everything stuffed into one cupboard so that it falls out all the time or something.

Ah crap. That was (slaps hands on thighs). I need to go to the bathroom now. Glad there is no one else around now.

In all senceirty, I loved this.

It sounds like Siefer does not have as much control as he would like. Every time he thought he had Zell where he wanted him, Zell showed the fighting, fast thinking side of himself.

There is one part where the two become embroiled in a physical fight in the dinning hall which left me a little confused. I do not understand how Zell ended up on Seifers back. He did end up facing away from him, as in the opposite direction?

not not familiar with the anime? But I still was able to envison this place. I had a boyfriend who went to a millitary academy and that helped.

Very nice. I had no idea what FF8 was, but thanks for explaining. I like the way it is only from Seifer’s pov, leaving us to imagine what Zell is thinking. The interaction between the two is hot and sexually charged. I think they’ll get together again. ~_*

I do have a couple of comments I hope you will find helpful. The section where you have Seifer literally rolling on the floor laughing seems very out of character for him the way he has been presented. Possibly you could have him sit down on the bed laughing. Still the same emotion, but he’s keeping in control and that’s seems important to him. Also at one point you use the word ‘uvula’, which you have of course used correctly, but it seems so clinical. You could use ‘the back of his throat’ or ‘the deepest recesses of his mouth’ ‘knocking at his tonsils’, something like that.

I will definitely stop back to read more and see where these two go.

Glinda

oooo... that was yummy... please write more! you must!

Ooooo, why don't you put stuff like this on your LJ? This was GREAT!!!! Sadly, I haven't been keeping up with my SeZ obsession, since it has been replaced by Sirius/Remus, but... SQUEEE! I think you just may have brought it back!

*hits herself* its the one from above......i didnt see that other people had reviewed, i thought i was the first, but can i still get a review? *gives the puppy dog look*

Hell yes, I liked that! I mean, I'm a straight female, but that was pure entertainment! Favorite part? Eh, all of it? Well, I like it when Zell was giving Seifer head. The little one actually LOOKS good at doing it, doesn't he? The part with Cid and Seifer's weird turn-off fantasy, wasn't my favorite, but it was funny. Had me lifting a couple of eyebrows though, as why Seifer would even consider thinking about the Headmaster in that way.
And if Zell was thinking of someone else? Well, he might have tried, but I think he failed. And the no kissing thing we'll be history... I bet Zell will take the initiative.
Great story, and I'd love more updates!

Hugs, Zierra