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Wow. Jesus, kid. I couldnt even read the first two paragraphs without wanting to show some hate. I was intregued by all your horrible reviews and though "there is NO way this story can be that bad"

Yeah i was wrong.

i mean just the way oyu incoroprate yourself into the story,"He never told Tifa about her before no one knew about her"
wtf is that?!

I read all your horrible reviews, and just got really curious. I mean there is no way it could have been that bad!

Jesus! I was so effing wrong.

I mean just the way you incorporate yourself into the story, "He never told Tifa about her before no one knew about her" Wtf is that?! I don't take Cloud to be the type of person to hold secret girl friends in his closets or anything. You could have atleast had enough decency to somehow placed yourself in there in a more prominent manner. Like i dont know. . . you were warped there through your playstation, atleast!

Oh! and another thing, suddenly out of the blue your having sex with Reno!? I dont think Reno's that big of a perv, thanks. Give him some respect. And jeez, seeing as this is a May-Sue, don't you have any dignity? or do you like picturing yourself as a retarded, dirty, slut child who makes guys rape each other for her love? i mean that in it self is a pretty damn weird concept. And to anyone who really enjoied this piece of crap - your just nasty.

I mean i would have LOVED to give you some positive feedback on your work, but after reading what i read? Woah. You really dont even deserve that. This story is the result of a very lazy writer (if i can even call you that) who dosn't give a damn about what they're even writing or what they're work projects to their readers. To me, this was just very selfishly written, and lacks any care or creativity. Its was just some out-there, tastless, raunchy - fanfic! Why would anyone embarass themself this much?

You need to die. kthx.

Dude, you're desperately in love with characters that aren't even REAL?! What the hell! Yeah, it's okay to like characters from games, movies, etc., but good god, to fantasize YOURSELF with them... Do you go outside at all? 'Cause you know, there's lots of happiness and sunshine out there. AND REAL PEOPLE THAT YOU CAN FANTASIZE YOURSELF WITH. REAL PEOPLE!!!!!!

You probably laughed at your reviews because you're too ignorant to understand them. Or perhaps they were just simply too long for your widdo mind to handle.

Well let me sum everything I wanted to say in once sentence.

You suck, and I'm leaving.

...Are you twelve years old? I would offer something constructive, but I honestly can't think of a single thing that would help this "story." You may find the flames you're getting to be amusing, but you should consider taking the advice offered seriously. I must say, I could write far better than this when I was ten years old, and that was without even trying hard. You may have missed this lesson in school, but there is such a phenomena as combining sentences. I know that may seem like a hard concept to grasp, but I can assure you that, with the help of a comma, you can pull it off.

I won't even bother to delve any further, as pretty much every other aspect of this abysmal failure has been noted. Although--and this must be stressed--I will reiterate the fact that your treatment of rape in this little fantasy of yours says a lot about who you are as a person...and it's not pretty. Given how common rape actually is, I have no doubt that some of the brave souls who have attempted to get through this trite piece of garbage have been victims of rape. The least you could do is have the compassion to treat the topic seriously. Unfortunately, I fear that to do so would require some measure of literary talent, which you are assuredly lacking.

I hope that one day (preferably soon) you will be able to admit to yourself that writing is not your talent and move on to something that you can excel at...like selling Avon. The ability to be a truly good author is something one is born with, and it is a gift that you do not possess.

I'm seriously trying to work out if this thing is a troll or if it's for real.

If it's for real, I ditto everything that the other reviewers said. SPELL-CHECK SPELL-CHECK SPELL-CHECK. And don't automatically label the story as a Mary Sue; you bring out the Horde, and We aren't known for kindness. And, no more rape plots for you. I ban you from using rape in a story ever again.

In the off-chance that this is a troll, however, it's very convincing.

This isn't about the story, since everyone else said pretty much all I would have said. It's about something rather more fundamental. I just checked your profile and... look, honeychile, I'M a twenty-three year old woman. I highly doubt YOU are given the quality of your output and your obvious immaturity ('don't like don't read'? How in the Hell am I supposed to know if I'll like it before I've read it?). If you're any more than fourteen, I'll be amazed. Please, admit you're still in junior high and stop sullying the good name of twenty-three year olds everywhere.

... I really hope you're not twenty-three. I could have called this as abysmally written garbage when I was thirteen.

If you really are twenty-three, well... wow. What the Hell were you doing when you were in school? If you couldn't be bothered to pay attention back when you should have been picking up the essentials of written English, why are you now deluding yourself you can write? Take a few remedial English classes and grow the Hell up. If you're not, -why are you here-? There's a clue as to who should be visiting and posting to this site in its goddamned NAME. Come back when you hit eighteen. Take the time to learn to write. You'll be amazed what a difference it makes.

Oh - you do realize you've said your amazingly slutty Mary Sue has 'a body to kill'? Now there's a Freudian slip if ever I saw one. I'd certainly like to kill her - and so, going by these reviews, would pretty much everyone else who's had the misfortune to read this thing. Did you perhaps mean 'a body to kill for'? Have you ever heard of proof reading? I recommend trying it sometime. You'll be surprised what you find.

I read, no lie, about 2 sentences of this story and absolutely knew, RIGHT AWAY, that it s-u-c-k-s. I am SORRY you have to be such a bad writer. I KNOW I'm not a good writer, but damn girl, you NEED to just delete this story ASAP and free yourself. Oh em gee, I read all the reviews and the people who said this story is good are probably just losers like you who don't know how to write a fairly bad story. And yes, I AM saying this story is bad. I'm not going to apologize for being harsh because damn it bitch, I AM being harsh. You REALLY need to learn how to use commas and GROW UP! This is -A-ff for a reason, so the more mature lot of us can actually read interesting stories. And sugah, please tell me WHAT the hell you were thinking when you wrote a Mary-Sue? What was going through your head? Definitely not 'Everyone will love this piece of work' ohhhhh noooo dearie, everyone HATES this work >< I AM sorry to say this, but you disgust me. I seriously thought I was a bad writer, but damn girl, you just totally boosted my self-esteem. A WHOLE LOT. That, I have to thank you for.

Please delete this story. Thank You.

Christa knocked herself in the washroom.

Like....knocked herself out? Or what?