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Oh my gosh he's dead. O_o Ahh. O_o

Nice chapter. I hope you write the rest soon.

Great chapter! It really shows Yazoo's emotions perfectly and I felt so bad for him. You've gotta continue, I love this fic!

aww!!!! poor Yazoo! awwww!!!!!! *sniff* wow

(sniffle) NOOOOO! Ahem. Anyway, so sad killing Kadaj off, but I like how it plays on Yazoo's emotions. I am really getting excited for the next part, seeing as how fragile (but bitterly angry) Yazoo must be right now. Anything could happen. I like to think that Cloud would not be so heartless, but then...Vincent would never REALLY do what happened in the first part as far as I see it, and THAT sure hasn't kept me from eating this fic up, so...BRAVO! And please keep going. There are some typos, but the plot is too well done to detract. Anxiously waiting again...

Wow! Ch3 was really intense. I mean, can I breathe now? ~_~"
Thanks for one more excellent chapter.
Your fic's goin' right to my personal FF collection. ^^ *chus*

I re-read the first chapter and must say that I love the "chocobo in head lights" line! Nice!

I really hope your next chapter is longer! I was just getting myself fully glued to my screen when the chapter ended. Ahh and the cliffie! Cliffies are evol! XD Good cliffie though, I can't wait to find out what happens next. I truly hope you continue soon, the suspense is killing me. :) Great story so far.

This was really wonderfull. I love how vunerable you made Yazoo, and the relationship between him and Loz is quite adorable. Actually, the relationship between the two of them is probably my favourite part of this story. I normally don't like stories in where there in unconsentual sex, but this was written very nicely. Really, this is one of the best stories I have read on here.

i don't know who told you that you weren't a good writer, but they lied to you. your piece here feels a little rushed in spots--mostly things i would have expanded on that you didn't--but it is a good piece of writing. you've done well. i'm anticipating more of this story.

eerian

Not a good writer, I think that is quite a mistaken belief. I was floored to see a new part, and I enjoyed the brotherly interaction, though I am not so sure about the City of the Acients part. I thought perhaps Vincent would show up again when Yazoo was alone in Midgar, but having things like this, changing the story-line...it does intrigue me. You better not leave things here. More!

oooooooooh, cool! ^_^ What happens next, what happens next?! I hope you update soon, I really wanna see what happens next. ^_^