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Oh please update soon!!!! This story is so sweet! i love it!!! Cloud is so hot! Oh and how old is Zack? Keep up the good work!

Hey, for this being your first yaoi story (that's what you said in the beginning, right?) This is a, pardon my French, a damn good story. I was flicking through the AFF.net FF7 pages earlier today and started to look for a Cloud x Zack pairing. I found yours and couldn't even take a break to drink my coffee. (which is a miracle in my house). You have done ABSOLUTELY wonderful with this pairing!

Now, since I'm normally a short review person, if I tried to continue and compliment your writing, I'd end up repeating myself. ^_^. Can't wait till the next chapter! Wish AFF had author alert!

~^~ Alessan ~^~

PLEASE UPDATE SOOOON!!! I WANT TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS NEXT!!!

OMFG you rule! i love this fic! it's the best you know i kinda given up on finding a sweet long worth reading fic of zackXcloud but you tottaly made me motivated all again so i beg you please finishe this fic i have to read more! it's so wonderful and sweet and wahhh loved it abselutly the best that i have read so far! pleeeeease continye it and dont give up half way throug like others do!
i want more! zackXcloud rules! and you rule too sistar~!

I haven't seen too many Zack/Clouds so I decided to check it out and I loved it! Awesome story, I'm usually turned off by first timeers. But this is going extrememly well. Too bad Kyo arrived early. o.0 The biggest disappointment is waiting for the next chap. :P I hope you update regularly, Keep writing!!!

Loved it. Truly, completely loved it. Entranced by it. Your work left me speechless. Your style has a "novel-like" quality, so to speak, that most fanfictions do not possess. The analysis of your characters was well led, and as I am a big fan of Zach's as well, I must say I was glad you wrote this to "indulge" in my bad habits.
I've read the four chapters in a row and it was so enjoyable that I was frustrated when I reached the end of the fourth one. I know it is useless to press you, since too much "pression" is never good for authors, but I'll just say that I'll be THRILLED when your next chapter is issued. A shame you do not have more reviews yet...

Go on !

(And sorry for the English. Really.)

hope you don't mind if I post on each chappie but your story is so cool!!!! I luff it!!! x333

hello! just wanted to say i really like this fanfic so far ^__^ good job!! hope u update soon!!

I am actually enjoying this :). Also, it sounded like you wanted a little bit of constructive criticism, so here's a quick few pointers;

"You're" is a shortening of 'you are'. So... "You're great!" would be alright. But you've used it in place of "Your" as in possession, like "Your hair" or "Your apartment" a few times.

"Too" should only be used as a measurement - "too much", "too little", "too sore" etc. You've used it in place of "to" as in "going to" in a few places.

Those little niggling things would be worth fixing :), as that aside your writing style is pretty good. And for your first yaoi? Pretty awesome :). I've seen "this is my first yaoi!" so many times and thought "oh god", but this fic is actually cute, sweet, and nicely believable so far. Sometimes people go a bit too far with the Woes And Angst of Cloud in Soldier theme, but yours is going nicely so far. I'll enjoy reading more of it :).

Hey, I'm Really into this story, super-cool job bud!!! it has perfect pace, pleeeeeaseeee update, please, please, please. and some louuuve scenes would be nice (wink,wink) LOL, so keep up bud, Full supporter :)