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Interesting first chapter but the only jarring thing was the typo of 'too' instead of 'to' at the end where Cloud says 'I don't plan too'. Apart from that this appears to be a promising beginning to a fic and I'll be off to read the rest of the chapters now.

All the best,
ryu.

I just found this story yesterday, and I've now caught up with it. Its amazing. Please post the next chapter soon!

Beautiful, but I just know this is going to have an unhappy ending...this is the problem with being a Zack/Cloud fan, every story you read ends happily never after...

well you never stop amazing me with your awseome writing style ,this chapi was great, i liked the fact that you actually focused on the part where Jin dies cuz honestly in the game it was so uncaring they were all like .."yeah your right seph we need to carry on and he was only a super minor charecter so who cares if hes dead" it was so unrealistic..oh well he really was'nt importent in the game but i liked the way you made it more realistic in the fanfic , also the last sceane with Zack & Cloud was so sweet and tender you made the right choice making it more romantic then hot i loved it~
i can't wait for the next chapter im dying to see how youur gonna warp it up but i reaaaaaally hope you'll also wright an epilouge since i love the way you wright, and because i love Zack+Cloud and im in tottal denayl regarding squers end of Zack's life..stupid basterds.
By the way your actually my favourite fanfic auother so keep up the good job ^_^

what a cool chapter! i am really happy you left Cloud's mother in there, is that her real name, or did you make it up? i am really happy you are making an effort to give the C/Z relationship time to develop, and mums reaction was really cool too. your fic is sweet, kind, and respectful, which i like as there is quite a bit of smut out there ( which i totally like too) but this makes for a lovely contrast.
i am looking forward to the other chapters, although it does mean the end.

Ah, that was a nice chapter - I'm glad it all worked out for Cloud in the end. Of course I know what's coming up...and unless you make this an AU, it's gonna have a sad ending :( Nooo! Don't have a sad ending!
Oh, and great chapter! Be sure to email me when you update!

Honestly i felt like crying at the end of this chapi....it was such a sweet chapter with a bit of a bitter feeling at the end ,you wrote it perfectly~! im really happy you did dicaided to include the sceane with Cloud's mother because it really is an importent sceane in my opinion and since in the game itself they only showed flashes of it it's really easy to manipulate it to fit your own story and by doing that you made your story more belivebal..making it possibale for all of this wonderful fantasy to actually be a part of the original game (or rather making it esiar for delusinol fangirls like me to pretend it was infact the true story before the ff7 game ^_^ tnx for that i can now die in peace...on the other hand i think i'll die in peace after you will complete this fanfic yep that will make me happely content).
Im so happy Cloud's mother accepted their relationship! i also think that the fact that she accepted it so well is great for the part when in the game Cloud talks about his past but dosnet really wanna talk about his mother since it was such a happy memory that realted to Zack but then he repressed all his memorys of Zack when he died and took on his personality(sorta)...anyway~~ im rambeling and i wrote waaay too much this time..but i guess it's because i really liked this cahpter and because it's been so long since you updated. well then im looking forward to the next chapter, im sure it's gonna be a great one(yet sad ;_;) . Rinoa.

This is good, and by that I mean so so so SO good. Everything is perfectly written, all their reactiosn to each other, the progress of their relationship...it took me damn ages to read it, but it was well-worth it, I can assure you. Wow, just wow.
Alas, though, I know what's to come, and the likelihood that there won't be a happy ending. Unless you change it? That'd be nice, but somehow I don't think it's gonna happen. And all those delays just stretching out the inevitable...wah, I don't want it to happen! *sniffle*
ReaperRain
p.s. ah, would it be possible for you to email me when you update the story? Just so I can keep track of everything - and that way I'll be able to review as well!

nice, really nice, i am really curious to see how you are all going to draw it to a close! i just have to ask you, what does ja ne mean? keep up the cool writing

pppfff... if that is what you call an 'attempt' i would love to see what you have in store when you get all fired up! on to chapter 16 now!