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wahhhhh¬!! that was so hot! what a great chapter!! zack and cloud are so sweet toghether! your story is so good but i see angest up a head...i already feel for cloud. but please continue i cant wait to read the next chapter! and for your first lemon yaoi seacenit was really good and it's ok that it's long cuz the more the better ^_¬ keep up the good work!

Wonderful chapter!! I can't wait for the next. And what's up with Cloud's eyes being all glowy ?_? Hmmmm, please update as soon as possible, and thank you for lemony goodness ^-^ I shall love you forever more. What's the file say? What's Sephiroth gonna say ... or is it Zack that says it ... whatever it is that they might say ... hmmm. Update soon, k?

OMG Mystic! THAT WAS SO FRICKEN HOT!!! -tacklehugs and showers in zack plushies- It was just...I can't even think of a word to describe it! Wonderful, wonderful job from my favorite Zack/Cloud authoress :3. That part at the end of the chapter surprised me quite a bit and now I find myself feelin' sorry for Jin. Keep up the amazing work and maybe tak-san can do a little piccie?? -wags eyebrows suggestively-

Til the next chappy!
Ezzy

Hurry and update soon!!!! I need to know what happens next. Does Zack come and find out that Cloud has hypersensativity to mako? Does Sephiroth come and see him? Is he sent home because he's no longer eligable for the SOLDIER program? I neeeeeed to know. D| Anywho ... I love your story, don't know if I reviewed before, but I'm gonna do it again!!! What a wonderful plot, especially when Cloud got upset in Zack's kitchen and then he was like "holy poo, I punched his wall and broke stuff ::emo::" Keep the updates coming and I'll keep up with the reviews!!

since i only recently stumbled upon this fan fiction, i have only just read the story, and since meh computer ish a piece of crap i'm only going to post my review on this chapter! :3



OMG! i love this fanfic! i've read a LOT of ZackXCloud fics *it's in the hundreds* and this is BY FAR the best i've read. you stayed true to the original plot line (starying from it tho to make it your own), the characters aren't out of character hardly at all and the way you write makes me not want to stop reading! and i LOVED how it wasn't to fast paced. i HATE when the characters fall for each other i like the first chapter or so. the whole time i was reading i was like "I wanna make a Doujinshi now!!! ; ;"

(in case you don't know (you probably do tho), doujinshi=fancomic...because i can't write fanfics worth beans XP i only can draw)


much love, can't wait for the next chapter! :3

Tanoshii-Chan

you can't leave it like that!! *wails* Poor Cloud, can't wait for the next chapter though, you're doing an awesome job^^

I bet Jin has a crush on Cloud. Unless he's bipolar or something, that's the only reason I can come up with for his behavior. He's mean to Cloud at first to get his attention--also possibly because he's jealous of Cloud's talent--then he's nice to try to draw Cloud in, then he's jealous enough to make accusations because he wants Cloud to be with HIM and not Zack or Sephiroth, then he's nice again because he doesn't want Cloud to get in trouble for HIS jealousy.

OR he's uber-jealous of Cloud's talent and is trying to be nice to lure Cloud off his guard to open the opportunity to rape him.


~LS

sweet! ch14 was great! hm i think i know where the thing with Jin is heading~ but i'll wait and see. i really love this story it's so cute and intresting~! Zack and Cloud have never been cuter then in here and they are so well done and tottaly in charecter~!
i hope cloud will feel better soon but first he should be nursed to health by Zack ^_~
also hopeing to see them getting closer and more intemnet~!
you rock! keep the good work up!

Gotta go for now, But just wanted to leave a quick review (better than none) I love your story and cant wait for the next part!!

Yay! Update soon! Update soon! Clous acting like a girl was starting to get annoying, and as I said before, Sephiroth should join in ^^