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June 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
hmmm...i'm not sure i like this one as much. kind of like reading the epilogue to "the dark tower" by steven king, yeah its good, but i mentally would've been much happier with the story if i hadn't
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August 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
It was a good story. Kind of sad at some parts though. Keep it up.
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July 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Wow...I have read this and the first one. I really, really like it. It is so original and so out of the norm...
Mmm and Vincent as an evil sex vampire, heh, you just made my day. Usually I don't go for Cloud stories, but I loved this one. Even at work yesterday I was reading the first story on my cell phone. ^_^ Thank you for this wonderful piece of art.
Mmm and Vincent as an evil sex vampire, heh, you just made my day. Usually I don't go for Cloud stories, but I loved this one. Even at work yesterday I was reading the first story on my cell phone. ^_^ Thank you for this wonderful piece of art.
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June 17, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Well, I didn't quite finish it. The idea is enduring, and you seem to have an excellent knack for description.
The grammar needs a little work. It's really hard for me to read a story that switches between past and present tenses so much, and I actually think that if you were to correct that, I'd be able to get through it much easier.
Great job all in all, and good luck with future chapters!
The grammar needs a little work. It's really hard for me to read a story that switches between past and present tenses so much, and I actually think that if you were to correct that, I'd be able to get through it much easier.
Great job all in all, and good luck with future chapters!