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September 30, 2007 at 12:00 AM
*wiggles* This is getting so exciting~! :3 *Greatly anticipating the next chapter* I hope it contains more W/N smexing. xD
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September 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
OMG its an update!!!!I swear I've been cheking this thing all day long, and when I was about to shut off the computer I had this sudden need to check again, and there it is, chapter 10!!
Thank you, thank you!!
I'm loving the character development and the interaction betwen Restrictor and nero, awwww and that last part with nero and weiss was soo sweet!!
thank you again, and you have nothing to apologize for,anyway, this chapter was great, I loved it!!
update soon? pretty please!!!^_^
Thank you, thank you!!
I'm loving the character development and the interaction betwen Restrictor and nero, awwww and that last part with nero and weiss was soo sweet!!
thank you again, and you have nothing to apologize for,anyway, this chapter was great, I loved it!!
update soon? pretty please!!!^_^
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September 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wonderful to see another update, especially one with Restrictor in all his sadistic glory. Looking forward to seeing just how far he will go to toy with Nero ;) Guess you're going to have to adjust things a little bit with Crisis Core, but definately looking forward to reading about how it all pans out.
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September 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
After waiting for the next chapter for over a month, I do hope you haven't forgotten about this story. ^^ Of course, you should feel free to take your time, I would just hate for the story to die.
The quality of the chapters are better than the beginning. The only problem I noticed was word errors. For example saying 'the thief wanted to steel the object' instead of: 'the thief wanted to steal the object'. But, as I've said, this has improved as of late.
The quality of the chapters are better than the beginning. The only problem I noticed was word errors. For example saying 'the thief wanted to steel the object' instead of: 'the thief wanted to steal the object'. But, as I've said, this has improved as of late.
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June 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Thanks so much for the mention *blush* I'm always happy to help out however I can ^_^
Another excellent chapter. I really enjoyed the introduction of the two new Tsviets and really enjoy how you write Argento. She does come across as rather mysterious in the multiplayer mode.
And of course, great smexing :3
Another excellent chapter. I really enjoyed the introduction of the two new Tsviets and really enjoy how you write Argento. She does come across as rather mysterious in the multiplayer mode.
And of course, great smexing :3
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June 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
:o I have some critique here!
It’s possible then that more exist here in Deepground....
er.... what are you trying to say?
Nero was rather enjoying his position on Weiss’s lap, and how easy it was to keep his finger combed in that wild mane of white hair,
I hope Nero has more than one finger...
That's all I found! Awesome chapter. It was... incredibly fast paced! Nero learned to use a gun, Nero and Argento meet, Weiss and Nero have sex, Weiss meets Indigo and Viridis. Who was Verde in Chapter 8, but that might have been changed, I must check. And Weiss and Indigo fight. A lot to put into one chapter. You did manage it without making it sound choppy, but i still think that it should be broken up a bit, and more detail added. I have no idea where by any means, but maybe you could point out why Indigo and Viridis made an explosion for the hell of it, and maybe a bit more on Weiss putting his clothes on. It was only one word, so I managed to skip over it and I had one thought for the rest of the fic (before I reread it) - Is he fighting Indigo naked?! I reread it, and looked for it, and Weiss did "redress" himself, but it was a little hidden. Easy to skip over. Also, might want to add how Argento knew Weiss and Nero had sex. I mean, was she there? It was the first time they'd done it, and she's onto them!
Great fic, looking forward to more.
It’s possible then that more exist here in Deepground....
er.... what are you trying to say?
Nero was rather enjoying his position on Weiss’s lap, and how easy it was to keep his finger combed in that wild mane of white hair,
I hope Nero has more than one finger...
That's all I found! Awesome chapter. It was... incredibly fast paced! Nero learned to use a gun, Nero and Argento meet, Weiss and Nero have sex, Weiss meets Indigo and Viridis. Who was Verde in Chapter 8, but that might have been changed, I must check. And Weiss and Indigo fight. A lot to put into one chapter. You did manage it without making it sound choppy, but i still think that it should be broken up a bit, and more detail added. I have no idea where by any means, but maybe you could point out why Indigo and Viridis made an explosion for the hell of it, and maybe a bit more on Weiss putting his clothes on. It was only one word, so I managed to skip over it and I had one thought for the rest of the fic (before I reread it) - Is he fighting Indigo naked?! I reread it, and looked for it, and Weiss did "redress" himself, but it was a little hidden. Easy to skip over. Also, might want to add how Argento knew Weiss and Nero had sex. I mean, was she there? It was the first time they'd done it, and she's onto them!
Great fic, looking forward to more.
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June 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
OMG OMG!!! I can't believe this!!!its an update!!!!Oh i'm sooo happy!!!
thought this fic was dead
I hope you are okay now(from that blood patch thing), and thank you soo much for updating,
this 2 chapters made my day seriusly.
love the way you write Argento, soo calm and mysterious, but how did she knew that Nero and Weiss had sex?
Oh and that was a great sex scene!!!!
can't wait to read more!!please update sonn!!^_^
thought this fic was dead
I hope you are okay now(from that blood patch thing), and thank you soo much for updating,
this 2 chapters made my day seriusly.
love the way you write Argento, soo calm and mysterious, but how did she knew that Nero and Weiss had sex?
Oh and that was a great sex scene!!!!
can't wait to read more!!please update sonn!!^_^
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June 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Yea! I'm so very happy that you're continuing this story :D Another excellent chapter, I'm definately enjoying how you're having Restrictor play a bigger role, he's such an evil bastard! I hope that you'll cover the story behind how Nero gets his wings as well!
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June 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I love your latest chapter, and the rest of the chapters of course. Lovely fic! Very dark when it comes to Nero. I always keep thinking that whenever Nero is around, there is very little light, while when Weiss is around, there are brightly lit corridors. Nice writing style - vivid imagery.
~ I_Desire_my_Valentine
~ I_Desire_my_Valentine
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June 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
0.o
Are you..god?
{Howdy! I just joined AdventChildren forums (Grigio) and was directed to read this fiction...)
and omfg i'm glad that i did...I was pretty much squealing and whimpering the entire time!!!! I'm going to read all the rest of yours now
-nods-
I'm still pretty sure you're god tho.....kyyaaaa! update soon please god-sama! T^T
{Oh...at the first chapter or something you said that you had/knew where to get the script for DoC online event, i'd really appreciate it if you sent me a link or something of the like....}
Are you..god?
{Howdy! I just joined AdventChildren forums (Grigio) and was directed to read this fiction...)
and omfg i'm glad that i did...I was pretty much squealing and whimpering the entire time!!!! I'm going to read all the rest of yours now
-nods-
I'm still pretty sure you're god tho.....kyyaaaa! update soon please god-sama! T^T
{Oh...at the first chapter or something you said that you had/knew where to get the script for DoC online event, i'd really appreciate it if you sent me a link or something of the like....}