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Hello! I've been in this fandom for 10 years, and I've been an enormous fan of this pairing for 10 years, and frankly, this fic is probably number 1 in my favorite RudexReno fics EVER. For someone's first Yaoi, it's *glorious*. Absolutly amazing, and wonderful, I can't wait to see what happens next ~ just like Reno. I love the pace you're going at, and the way you choose to write, guh, absolutly everything about this fic is breathtaking! I will wait as long as it takes for the rest!

This buildup up is painful, yet pleasurable. I'm still loving your work. Please continue soon.

You go girl, this is so good. Probably the best Rude/Reno fic I've ever come across! Please update soon, and I'll be sure to read it!

DA

Oh wow...O_O This was the most fascinating Rude/Reno story I've ever read...both very sensual, and very sweet and hot at the same time. I am impressed that I saved the thing. *grin* Please, PLEASE continue, I must see more of this hotness as soon as you can post it! Maybe the world can wait, but I can't wait for more of this! XD What a wonderful piece of work! Congrats, and do keep up with it, and soon! <3

Awesome addition to the story, but a paragraph was doubled in the first part of the new chapter. You might want to fix that. Other than that, I'm pleased with it. I'm loving the slow build up.

Arrrgh, I hate you! You can't leave this story like this! Not fair!!!
XD Please do hurry for the next part, okay?

Hey, just a quick review to say that for your first yaoi, it's not bad at all. I've seen first lemons/yaoi attempts that are... well... bad, but yours certainly doesn't fit that category. I can understand your nervousness, though: lemons are some of the most nerve-wracking things to write, even for authors who've written lots before. But you're doing well, and the story is pretty damn hot at the best of times. As well as the physical stuff you've got plenty of insight into both the minds of Reno and Rude. Just keep going at the pace that suits you.

For criticism, I did catch a couple of grammatical errors - missing apostrophes and the like. And there was one paragraph that was doubled up. Just keep your eye out for things like that. And as for content... personally, all I'm really missing is some more dialogue, as it was the banter in the game and AC that gave this particular pairing such great potential. Some more verbal exchanges between Reno and Rude could really heat things up more.

So, yeah, keep going! I'm waiting anxiously for the next chapter!

I think this is excellent work. I like how you lead into the act instead of just "wham bam get it done". The foreplay is what really makes a yaoi piece work because when it all comes down to it the foreplay is what sets your yaoi scene apart from the rest of the scenes out there. Also you are building up to the big act and by breaking the chapters up the way you do it also makes the reader want to come back for more. I guess it could kind of be like sex huh. Your descriptions and writing is wonderful there are few yaoi stories that catch my attention, and yours has definately done that. So keep up the good work and please update soon.

I love your story... Love it to the brim of my soothed soul. I'm not very poetic but you words are amazing. I just jumble everting up...^^;

Such an awesome build up. You're doing great. Can't wait for the next chapter!