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November 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hey! It's Christy, dropping a line. I have to admit, it started out interesting. It would probably be easier to read if you shorten your paragraphs. And whenever someone speaks out loud, you start a new paragraph.
"Like this..."
Anyway, I think you have promise, you certainly did a good job with the 'tumble' in the gym. ^_^
Anyway, I'll probably go read the next chapter now. If there is one...I don't remember...
"Like this..."
Anyway, I think you have promise, you certainly did a good job with the 'tumble' in the gym. ^_^
Anyway, I'll probably go read the next chapter now. If there is one...I don't remember...
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October 18, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Great start, I can't wait to see more so please update when you can!
-SheWolfe7
-SheWolfe7
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September 16, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Interesting start ^^