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Herm, your story is everywhere. I got lost for a few seconds and had toreread the second chapter. I suggect you get those thoughts in your head collected, try and put mor detail in the chapters and maybe put more stuff, like in Chapter 2, you could of had Reeve and Cid fight a bit to get the gun out of Cid's hands. Make it more inense and interesting, y'know?

YOU KILLED MY PRECIOUS!!!!!! How dare you?!?!?! After all my editing work! YOUKILLMYBABY! On another note, I love it! Torture them senseless. AND WRITE MORE!