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December 30, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Yesssss...yummy, hot, steamy man Sephiroth rocks!!! I love this pairing so much and Vincecnt was just so tempting and submissive....I would love to read more!!
Loved the end when he said "Like I would let you go!"
Loved the end when he said "Like I would let you go!"
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October 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Now don't make me write a review a third time! Damnit, I just did. Don't make me writie a fourth one then! Write more, blast it! You have a talent for writing this pairing, and its much better than your Vin/Cloud one. They seem OOC in that one, but this one is excellent. WRITE. MORE. SOON. !!!!!
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July 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
hahah cute XD soooooo whens next time XD
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July 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I loved the next time thing, a really hot fic, great work :3
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July 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I insist you write more.
Also, read over this first because I noticed some more errors - like toung is spelled tongue. And some minor errors like an extra s on waist (it made it plural, and I doubt Vincent has more than one waist) and is instead of his. Otherwise, still a fun read because sex on the beach with Sephiroth and Vincent is NOT available anywhere on AFF.net except here.
Now write more!
Also, read over this first because I noticed some more errors - like toung is spelled tongue. And some minor errors like an extra s on waist (it made it plural, and I doubt Vincent has more than one waist) and is instead of his. Otherwise, still a fun read because sex on the beach with Sephiroth and Vincent is NOT available anywhere on AFF.net except here.
Now write more!
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April 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Excellent Sephiroth X Vincent fic. I rarely see many.
There were several errors, but not many. There was a period in the middle of a sentence, and "funnier" is the comparative of "funny," not fun. The comparative for fun is "more fun."
Fun, more fun, most fun. Funny, funnier, funniest.
Excuse the grammar devil in me, but grammar is part of what makes a good story.
Here are some good points (do not worry, I do not just look for the bad in a story):
1) Wonderful story idea.
2) Good plot
3) Nice, erotic sex scenes. A delicious read.
4) Characterization was not my preferred choice, but you did make it fit in well with the storyline. Good job!
All in all, four out of five stars! Good work and keep going. Especially on my (and your?) favorite pairing, Sephiroth / Vincent. There is not enough of it in the world. Thanks for the nice read.
There were several errors, but not many. There was a period in the middle of a sentence, and "funnier" is the comparative of "funny," not fun. The comparative for fun is "more fun."
Fun, more fun, most fun. Funny, funnier, funniest.
Excuse the grammar devil in me, but grammar is part of what makes a good story.
Here are some good points (do not worry, I do not just look for the bad in a story):
1) Wonderful story idea.
2) Good plot
3) Nice, erotic sex scenes. A delicious read.
4) Characterization was not my preferred choice, but you did make it fit in well with the storyline. Good job!
All in all, four out of five stars! Good work and keep going. Especially on my (and your?) favorite pairing, Sephiroth / Vincent. There is not enough of it in the world. Thanks for the nice read.