rate_review Reviews

It doesn't suck. It's a great story and It's the first time you've done first person writing, you did very well, :-D.

dont be so hard on yourself about your writing. i really enjoyed it, especially Seph's perverted little sceme to get cloud into his room. i like reading the contrast to how i see seph as a bit of a tragic hostile loner to a perverted sex freak that porks his way through the cadets at the academy ( hah!) looking forward to a next chapter!