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I liked it when he got protective too. Yay, Vincent! Being all hero-like and stuff. :)

Poor Yaz, he's just too damn pretty for his own good. Kid better learn how to fight soon, I reckon, in case something like this happens again.

Great update!

I love what you've got going so far! I knew that dirty priest was up to no good D: May I suggest something, however? I've used a word processing program called abiword, which is like the pricey windows one, except it's free. And the best part, it has spell check, so you don't have to stress over it too much :D Below is the link to the download. Hope to see more wonderful updates soon! :3 ♥
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Oh my. Oh, my my my. *is still wiping tears of laughter away* That fairy tale ending of Yazoo's was friggin' hilarious. I do think that's the best line you've given him so far! If only ALL fairy tales ended like that. Dude. Seriously funny. :D

I think kid Kadaj would be a lot more difficult and obnoxious than kid Yazoo, for sure. I think it's totally realistic how Yazoo acts, given where and when he's been living but you can still see moments of future Yaz lurking in there. Don't worry about your characterisation. You're doing a top job keeping him consistently true to the persona you've created for him and I don't believe you've faltered once. *two thumbs up*

Nice sweetly awkward bit in there with Vincent not knowing what to do with a sleepy Yaz. Aw. *hugs*

Damn church. Damn Aeris dragging him there. I know she means well but sheesh, there is such a thing as being TOO good. And naive. Usually the people in charge of the church are worse than the evil they preach about. I just hope Yazoo doesn't take any crap from that bastard and stands up for himself. Which I'm sure he will. Like he'd say in his own words, "Da hell wit all dat prayin' and singin' an shit." (was that a good impression? :P)

Looking forward to the next parts!

Aww, Storytime with Vincent, lol.

I don't think that you should be critisised for making young Yazoo a bit Kadaj-y. I'm not entirely against the idea that Loz and even more so in the case of Yazoo being a lot like Kadaj when they were teens.

Kerianya XxX

Very nice interaction there between Yazoo & Vincent. Even if Yaz doesn't understand all of it, it's good to see him get a little bit interested in what this strange, softly-spoken man is into. Wonderful description of the library too. I could just see it lookin' all spookily romantic and stuff.

Must mention that I *love* the way you write Yazoo's dialogue - helps you get a better feel of what his lovely voice would sound like back in the day, if he was an uneducated, potty-mouthed brat. I feel kinda silly telling you this, but I find myself saying his lines out loud with a Sweeney Todd accent (not that hard to do since I'm Aussie and half Brit anyways :P)

Yes. I'm so lame. But your story is definitely not! As for the smut; don't rush it, yeah? Make sure you develop the story (and the characters) properly before any of that naughty business happens... ;)

Fantastic updates! Your portryal of Yazoo's grief for his brothers makes the chest hurt like it was intended to. Poor, poor lad. I do wonder how Kadaj and Loz are coping without him? Would be interesting to read about that, and to see if Reno is still around. Gotta love Reno, even though he's a pain in the ass. :)

And the last chapter...absolutely wonderful, m'dear! It was a lot of fun for us too, rest assured, heh. Great to see Aeris' wicked side and to see her have fun with Yaz like that. ;) Your description of Yazoo seeing himself for the first time was awesome. I loved it. So glad someone else thinks that Yazoo looks like an elf! Because, c'mon. He so does. Give him some pointy ears and a bow and arrow and he'd fit right into Middle Earth with Legolas. Mmm. Now there's a yummy thought...

Anyway, brilliant chapter, full of humour and delight. Easily one of my favourites so far.

PS. The bit about Loz and the seagull...I had to laugh! :D

:D Candy would make me happy too! I'm sure eventually he'll get the hang of those things they call baths. xD Can't wait for your next update, I've been checking back nearly every day since the last one for one. ♥

Lol, well if Yazoo had never seen his own reflection before I'm sure he would have reacted like that.

Aerith was having a whale of a time looking after sweet little Yazzie I see. I couldn't help smiling as she fussed around.

Can't wait for the next chapter!

Kerianya XxX

I am astounded yet again by your marvellous talent for drawing out my emotions as this story unfolds further! Yazoo's anguish was so perfectly written, and Vincent's parting sentiment was perfect...and so very true. I simply can't wait until the next chapter!

Kerianya XxX

More please, Thank you. :D ♥