rate_review Reviews

Pretty sexy. Would like to have seen more. Without Snow.
SailorNemesis

LOVED this story!! Well done!

One thing; you said it was your first of the voyeur series. Where's the rest? LOL.

Hoping you'll update soon.

JohnSlayer

I'm sorry to say that the story sort of turned into a graphic description of what sex between two girls could be like. Nothing more, nothing less.
You need to spice it up with good (and in character) dialogue as well as some mildly poetic touches, or it won't be interesting.
Go deeper into the actual feelings, not just that there are two girls who are hot on each other.

That aside, you don't write poorly, exactly. Any other topic I'm sure you'd do okay.
Smut's hard to write, after all.

I just want to say I really liked this story. It's probably my favorite Final Fantasy 13 smut fic out there right now.
I really hope to see more of this, only I really hope even MORE, that you will not be using any guys and keep it strictly yuri.

Just feels better hah, either way great story and I'll be twitching my thumbs for more yuri!

Disy

"Err…I guess you can say they were OOC (I think…)"

Yes, very out of character. Hot though, i like it nonetheless.