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Please write more soon. <3

Almost forgot!
Weiss didn't tell Nero that he had to pretend to love Restrictor this day.
He said he couldn't, but Restrictor didn't tell him anything, unless it was part of the rules you mentioned Restrictor went over?
That should be explained a bit in the next chapter or soon somewhere....
Just a thought, ignore it if you wish.

Oh wow, that was an amazing chapter, one of the best for sure.

You are one of the VERY few who manages to balance ALL charachters in a fic. I like that. The usual AFF fic is...
Guy sees guy.
Guy loves guy.
Guy has sex with guy.
And they lived happily ever after.

You have...
Guy sees guy.
One guy remebers childhood.
Evil guy comes.
Guy loves guy.
Guys friend comes along.
Other guy remembers childhood.
Evil guy rapes guy.
Guy's friend loves guy's friend.
Other guy heartbroken.
Guy has sex with guy.
Evil guy remembers childhood.
Guy's friends have sex.
Evil guy has sex with guy.
ECT.
ECt.
Ect.
ect.

It's amazing. Almost no one else has such complicated plot and so many twists. I love it!

(Of course, what I wrote wasn't in any particular order, I just wanted it to catch the gist of the complexity)

Once again, a fantastic read! You have quite a talent! =)

Thanks for reading my little comment. You said you proof your stories 4 times?
I'm not sure where you have the patience from, but your writing does show it.

I love the Mr. Z and Mari parts, they make another point of view in the story, making it more complicated, which is what I like!
I do hope you make this extremely long, there aren't enough well written, long fanfics around here.

I must say, you have quite a talent! Not many actually write so well, or have the charachters so intensly believable. I love it! 5 stars! This is definatly going to be favorite to watch for.


PS - There are several spelling mistakes in the last two chapters. Like shark contrast instead of stark - that sort of thing. Word doesn't pick it up.

You may say short, but I say sweet! I have to admit, that last chapter made me tear up a bit, lol. It was so touching. I'm so happy that they are seeing eye to eye again. I worry about what Restrictor's going to do to poor Nero though.

But I did enjoy the restrictor chapter as well, I can definately see him starting out as good but then circumstances made him bad, it is a lot like that in the FFVII world, Sephiroth, the Tsviets, all just circumstances.

Wah, I'm totally hooked on this story now, I know it's wrapping up, but I just want more!

T_T omg i could just cry!! having nero sings with his father was so beautiful!!! like he was trying to keep a connection that had never been there before. that was just too sweet for words! <3 such beautiful sapness! always gotta av a bit of that in there xp but iv been finding that wheneva you have them talk about the plan, i get scared of them following it through, because anyone whos played the game to the end knows whats going to happen! and when i have to read about it again, i know im going to ball my eyes out!! SO PLEASE! postphone it as much as you can! please do like 10-20 more chapters cuz i luve this story to much for it to end!

..maybe even after the paticular event..you could just have them survive it somehow? ^_^ mmm im becoming a bit to selfish i think lol you must have read L.L.Crush's one when she did that? you know, the one with vincent also in it? xD ok i will shut up! CANT WAIT FOR AN UPDATE!! GOOD WORK!!

oh my, those last two chapters were great!

Poor Weiss, you feel so sorry for him, but in a strange way you feel sorry for Restrictor as well, he's so hung up on Weiss but he'll never actually love him. But he's so evil.

And the arguement chapter was done so well too. I totally agree with you, couples do argue. It's just so sad that both Nero and Weiss want the same thing but they can't communicate that to each other.

Looking forward to reading more!

Heh, I don't want to like the Restrictor and Weiss pairing, but you write it so well! I totally don't think poor Weiss was enjoying himself, it was that aphrodesiac, drugs are evil, he was so brave to sacrafice himself to protect Nero, but I do think you got Nero's reaction spot on though, he's rather insecure about their relationship so he may see things that aren't really there.

Chapter six was very interesting, I found it a bit offsetting and disturbing, which I do enjoy from time to time, it's a great chapter for building up suspense, just what's going on? what's real and what isn't? Looking forward to more ^_^

wow, I really enjoyed the latest chapter, such a cliffhanger ending, can't wait for you to continue with the story. I know you say you aren't good with writing action, but I was certainly gripped. ^_^

I'm enjoying how everything is coming to a head now and starting to tie in with what we saw in multiplayer mode and the way that you explained Nero's accent is great too. Please continue!