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Reviews for To Trust A Cop

By : Shehanitan
  • From ANON - Silk on December 05, 2006
    I've read plenty of smut before, but this has got to be the most lemony fic I've read! I absolutely love it! A slutty Squall is the smex =D
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  • From Sammei on December 04, 2006
    Very nice, as always. Not used to seeing Squall and Seifer having normal sex. ;D Still hot, though, not AS hot without a little bit of kink. Heh, I did not just say that. >_< Anyhow, I'm glad that they "made up," though I'm still anxious as to how they actually start a pseudo relationship.. Seifer's not such a dick anymore, though. ^_^ Great job, can't wait for the next update!
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  • From ANON - florinoir on December 04, 2006
    /Seifer/ I want to do him again!!
    Relax, big baby, she doesn't seem to finish with you yet...
    /Squall/... daddy..?!
    /Seifer/ Well, you saw my cock...Daddy..Huhuhuhuhu...
    /Squall/Wathever...I'll call you sweet honey waffle if you continue what you were doing earlier...
    There 're both equally obseded... Bunnies!!
    Good continuation!^^
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  • From ANON - Jupitor Knight on December 04, 2006
    well your doing very well, the story seems to be progressing that was great makeup sex. Still a few problems with grammer and missing words but your beta can fix that when he gets caught up again. All in All very good.
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  • From ANON - Sharon on December 04, 2006
    Once more, for not having been proof read, it was a good chapter. You write smut well, though I think attempting any sensible plot is a bit of a reach for you. I'm always happy to see an update, but there are twelve chapters and I have no clue where you're going with this. Beyond arguing and having hot sex, there hasn't been any real development between Squall and Seifer. I'm not saying they should be in love at this point, far from it, but this last chapter might as well be the first for all the difference it makes.

    A whole bunch of chapters revolving around Seifer and Squall screwing each other makes for a great collection of PWP, though not a very good story. Don't get me wrong, I love the smex. You can have an awesome plot and storyline while also having a lemon in each chapter. It is possible, many authors have already accomplished as much, so I hope to see you achieve that at some point.
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  • From ANON - florinoir on December 03, 2006
    /Squall/ Nooooooooo!!I wanted to get laid!!T_T
    /Seifer/ I wanted to...
    Look what you done...Two unhappy frustrated bishos!
    Seriously, that was a great chapter!^^ Even if there was not sex,lol!^^
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  • From ANON - mystico_tala on November 28, 2006
    MAN I love this story :) I definitely like the direction you are going with it. I always get so impatient for new chapters :)
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  • From ANON - Tryst on November 28, 2006
    Aww! It's SO nice to see them getting along! The lack of smut isn't bothering me surprisingly enough. I adore your smut but I like to see them having a nice time just as much as I like to see Seif fuck the living daylights out of Squall. Well, not really, I think I like them fucking A LOT more but I don't mind the fluff!
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  • From ANON - Jupitor Knight on November 28, 2006
    And again you do so well. The plot is wonderful and going along fairly smoothly. Anyone who doesn't like this story is an idiot I think. Keep up the good no the excellent work
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  • From ANON - Sekre on November 27, 2006
    Awww. Seif's such a sweetheart!!! In his own way... xP Cute chapter - I can see why Squall was mad...He's like a private guy and Seifer can be overbearing. I'm amazed at how fast you get these chapters out - then again, they're so addicting, I think I'd sob my eyes out if I had to wait months between chapters. :) Wonderful job!
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  • From Sammei on November 27, 2006
    Loved this chapter! I really like the cameo Quistis made. And Seifer finally turning over a new leaf, I guess you could say. It was very nie to see them actually.. get along for once. I guess I can forgive the lack of smut... this time. ;D Hah, just kidding. Great job, as usual. Looking forward to your next update?
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  • From ANON - Sharon on November 27, 2006
    It was an interesting chapter, and the length was good. Smut or no smut, though I think that's really your strong point in all this, any story that’s attempting plot is not going to have much of anything worth telling if every chapter is centered on a lemon.

    I’m nitpicking because that’s what I do, but only for authors I feel deserve it. I feel you’re doing a good job and have a lot of potential to improve, hence my continued reading of this story.

    I know you do not have a beta, which explains all the awkward sentences and the errors here and there. I’ll mention a couple things that stood out. 1) Someone cannot speak ‘silently’ unless they’re speaking inside their head. I assume this is perhaps a small misunderstanding with your English. It is paradoxical to have someone say something aloud and describe their voice level as ‘silent’. ‘Silent’ has no real interpretive uses and is not synonymous with ‘quiet’. I think what you were going for was ‘quietly’. 2) I'm slightly thrown by Squall's lack of education, not even finishing elementary school. I know you made mention of it in the beginning, but it seems rather pointless and only demeaning to his character. At least make him a high school drop out, anything less doesn’t incite pity for the poor and prideful hero, but rather it diminishes respect held for him. 3) I haven’t read other responses to this story, but your author’s notes seemed to be trying to downplay some negative reaction to Seifer’s feigned rape. Extreme or not, that’s how you went with it as an author, so never mind what others think or let it influence too much. And also, given the piece you wrote that started all this… that stunt Seifer pulled is nothing. So I have to wonder who would complain about it after reading the prequel consisting of a gangbang.

    Okay, too long, but I didn’t review every chapter, so consider it compensation. Keep on writing and practicing, you’ve got a talent for lemons and potential for everything else. I assumed a lot in this review, so please don’t take my overbearing critique the

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  • From ANON - YACUMO on November 27, 2006
    YAY a review at last
    Excellent chapter.
    I loved how Seifer is starting to take more and more interest in oir Kitten.

    Hope to read you soon.


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  • From ANON - Anonymous on November 27, 2006
    I have love your story from the beginning. I have no clue why you dislike chapter eleven. I think it was very well written and sweet too. I like the fact that we now know the direction, the relationship may take with the star characters.
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  • From ANON - Momochi on November 27, 2006
    This is a very nice chapter! ^^ I loved how it's just not smutsmutsmut but there's some couple fluffy-ness. I love this story, please do keep updating!
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