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By : Rina76

From ANON - sporkoon on February 20, 2011
THIS is the most beautiful, spectacular masterpiece I have EVER read. Seriously. Please allow me to worship at your altar! XD
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From ANON - vivarose on November 28, 2009
ah found you again! A cute and sweet epilogue!
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From ANON - natzilla on June 14, 2009
I dont seem to have reviewed this story before amazingly enough, since I read it several times..But was it here or somewhere else ? It is simply the best Lozoo smut ever ! I am in need of a very cold shower every time I read it. And your descriptions of the brothers are stunning, breathtaking as usual !
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From ANON - Hakucho on May 15, 2009
Hi Rina76,

I was deeply moved by the lovely review you left on my story, although reading this fiction of yours I can only say you wasted your precious words on a novis like me, when in fact you are an amazing writer. Your words are wonderfully zesteful and the conent of the story is rih in flavour and blooming with images that tease the senses like tender seduction. I love the brother of Sephiroth and as you, I simply adore the complexity of Loz. I hope you will find the ontinuation of the Silver Phoenix enetertaining enough to glance through it, for I am most curious about how you will find my portrayal of Loz on his return. He is far more different as compared to before and just as you touch upon the subject of feminity, I have introduced heterosexual aspects to the story as well. This only to make the men more bisexual as it gives the stories more depth. I loved this "Lef Out" story and do belive me I don't often leave reviews as I have had very little time lately. I was hoever, most curious about the way you are writing as I have read some things before, but this I had to read in one go as it was really captivating. It was a very very good story and I hope we will ahve mroe to talk about in the future.

Another awesome character is of course Nero the sable as he is a lonewolf who is cast aside through the curse that is set upon him due to his powers. I identified a bit of him in Loz as you have depicted Loz here (and true to his character I must add). Nero's obsession with his brother but not due to the fact that he cannot love anyone else, but ratehr because he has never felt another person's touch on his body due to the fact that anyone who coems close enough is consumed by his darkness (hence how he accidentally killed his own mother at birth). However, these chapter are far ahead in the story.

I really liked this story and the sex was tender, yet had elements of roughness with the right blend and you described the scences with addition of humour as well as seriousness AND most importantly YOU WERE NOT VULGAR!!!!! I admire writers who can write sex-scenes without having to use crude words. Keep up the good job and congratulations on a fantastic story. You are talented and I am impressed :) Hope to talk to you soon...

PS:PLease excuse any typos as it is late and my eyes are all gluey as the lenses are dry... but I couldn't drop this story.
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From EnideDear on February 16, 2009
I simply love this series, you have such a wonderful way of writing and such great characterisation! This is by far my fave series on AdultFF and as a shamless loz-fan I just have to love it even more *huggles him, gets electrocuted*
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From Kuragari75 on January 11, 2009
*sniffles* Well, I'm definitely sad to see this fic come to a close but what other sins can you throw into one bed scene? lol, I'm sure there's a long answer to that, but anyway! I certainly hope to see you continue writing, you have a lovely style! It's been an awesomely fun ride and I'll probably read this a few more times over. ^^
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From vivarose on January 08, 2009
Wonderful ending! The entire thing, just spectacularly written. And so nice to see it from Loz's point of view. A extraordinary piece!
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From schwaerze on January 08, 2009
Haha, I love you too *hugs back* Thanks for writing such a wonderful story, it�s clearly one of the best I�ve ever read about the SHM! ^^

I thought that they launched a kamikaze attack on Cloud by letting the materia explode (and because Yazoo said "Let�s get back together")... But of course I can be mistaken. And it still doesn�t make it less tragic... (But since Square Enix never confirmed that they actually died and one doesn�t see them dissolve into tiny green sperms like Kadaj did, I still have hopes. :D)

Heh, your describtion of Yazoo made me wonder what would *have* to happen, to get Yazoo loose his cool. I mean, even when he�s faced with a friggin BOMB all he does is this slight widening of his eyes! I suppose, since he�s been described as someone who isn�t affected by worldly matters the shocking thing shouldn�t come from the outside, but from within himself...

I�m glad you wrote an epilogue -although it�s kind of sad that it�s over now :(- and let Loz reflect on it again. I especially liked the part where he talks in the plural-form, as it also shows on a deeper level that he has come to finally accept that they are a unit and that he is part of it. And I really liked the 'amorality' you still gave them. I think it makes the bond they share even more evident, because they only find peace within themselves and they have to/ want to keep out the rest of the world.

The last sentence startled me though. It�s double negative and therefore it would mean that Loz IS still alone... But then I guess you can use it as a stilistic device too, can�t you? (Since I�m not a native speaker I would think that you used some kind of 'slang' or so? It confuses me a little).

So, it was a wonderful reading and I�m really looking forward to your next stories!!!

Take care!

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From ANON - Elenna on January 07, 2009
the ending made me smile!!
overall, it was a wonderfull story, and i really appriciate the emotion of everything and how its written. I suck at reviews so heres a cookie. -gives cookie-
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From ANON - Ravenlyn on December 30, 2008
YAY! *Jumps with joy* I loved reading this part! I was like wow at the end, and also I was saying "About effing time!" WOOT! Well, this certainly was one of the best fics I've ever read! I'm shocked at how they ended up building power like that. Now we know that you might have to take cover if you wanna watch them go at it. I give your fic ten stars! ^____________^
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From schwaerze on December 29, 2008
Another chapter! *happy dance* About Kadaj and his vulnerable side: I think you explore that perfectly, without making him appear like a wimp. As you said: he has that side, no doubt, but you still manage to not reduce him to that and also show, that he is still dangerous and very capable of taking the lead. Great job! You�re right: he IS badass and we DO love him for this! Or at least I do ;)

I feel so very honoured, that you put that neck-biting part in just for me! That�s soooo cute! Thank you so much, that just made my day!

I think the end of the movie tells us that they do not want to live without each other or mother, otherwise Yazoo and Loz wouldn�t have committed suicide...

Now, on to the new chapter;)

It was so heart-wrenching when Loz gave an insight into his desire to please his littlest brother and be of use for him, and at the same time his fear to fail him. I could really feel that despair, and I�m glad that Loz found some peace now, he surely deserves it!

Hah! And Kadaj topping Loz, I never saw that coming, but it reflects their relationship and their personalities very well! It shows the obedient, devoted side of Loz, and the dominating, authoritive side of Kadaj (albeit being willing to show his tender, vulnerable side, he�ll never let his brothers controle him... manipulative little prick, he knows how to push Loz� buttons XD) I�m wondering if Kadaj would really allow Loz to be on top... Although, as you describe it here, Loz is the one who secretly holds the power (poor Lozzy, has to do all the 'work' XD)

I just noticed (I�m writing this review while reading, so I won�t forget anything I want to say), that one thing I like so much about your story is, that you don�t just let them fuck and then everything is over (put object A into hole B), but that you describe the (ambivalent)feelings they (respectively Loz) have during the act. Kadaj and Yazoo may have a certain routine and experience, but it�s good that it�s not just all passion and easy-going, but that they actually have strong feelings, be it fear, uncertainty or confusion. I think that�s rather realistic and I compliment you on that. And because you still manage to write hot smut-scenes, it�s very well-balanced.

Hm... Do I sense a hint of frustration when Loz says that he wants to break Yazoo?

And what a climax XD But it did the foreplay justice. I was wondering if you would be able to top the awesomeness you had created before, and you did not disappoint, it was just perfect!

Now I hope that this isn�t over yet, I�d really like to see how Loz is coping, after he�s cleared his mind a bit and reflects on it... I think you mentioned some potential worries he might have (forgetting about mother, questioning their devotion to her, the incest-thing...).

Great chapter as always, thanks for writing it!!!

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From ANON - Ravenlyn on December 18, 2008
Wow. Part 8 made my head swim. I can't wait to see how this one ends. And is it just me or Kadaj a sadist? He gives off that sadist vibe for some reason in the story. And the way you write it I'd pay them a bazillion bucks to let me watch them go at it. Wow, just wow. ^_____^
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From vivarose on December 15, 2008
Ah I found the fic again! Marvelous job you've done here, Kadaj is such the slave driver on his two brothers!
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From schwaerze on December 13, 2008
Hm, about Kadaj seeking Cloud�s acceptance:I always thought he was crying because he hears 'mother' and get�s redeemed by Aeris... But that�s just my inerpretation of course, and whether he searchs for Cloud�s or Jenovas love you are right: he is partly young and innocent and wants to be accepted and loved.

And yes: YAY for girly Yazoo!!! (He�s so friggin gorgeous he�s spoiled me for all real life men *sighs*).

I�ll eagerly await your new story then! I love the idea of them being raised in a lab, even though I actually stick to the canon and see them as shinentai, remnants of Sephiroth.

'Because this is the best friggin� day of my creation.' - I liked how you avoided the word 'life' and what implications that holds.

I wish he wouldn�t cover up his neck all the time because it�s slim, graceful and elegant like the rest of him and one that any vampire would find hard to resist. - OMG YESSSSSS! Loz is so very right XD

I can see the two extremes of Loz very clear here, when he for one says that he has to be careful with his brother, because he fears to maybe hurt him. On the one hand he is that stong and dangerous individuum, but on the other he�s so gentle and carrying when he wants to be.

(Btw: I assume that you are Rina that reviwed 'abuse', right? Since this is a review about your story and not mine, I wanted to ask if you, maybe can have a look at the next chapter of abuse I�ll post here, so I can reply to your review?)

Aaah, and he get�s some payback, for Kadaj just 'selfishly hogging Yazoo all these years and not sharing him with' him. Pouting Loz is so cute XD

Although I have to say that Kadaj is somehow evil in this... I thought it was interesting how you say that Yazoo needs to be led. But actually I think it�s the same with all three of them, because Loz needs Kadaj too and Kadaj needs Jenova to lead him and give him a reason to exist!

Another great chapter, and it was really, really hot (had to fan myself at the Yazoo-slut part :D)!

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From ANON - Ravenlyn on December 08, 2008
I enjoyed reading their bonding, I found it cute especially the part when they kept messing with Loz by saying "Oh so he's the favorite and I'm second" that was funny and cute. And it's okay that there isn't much smut in the chapter, you're probably bracing us for the next chapter when things heat up again! And I admit, I'm used to you ending the chapters like that now and I'm cool with it. Keep writing so we can read more of your awesome fic. ***** Five Stars for you! ^_^
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